Young people make decisions based on their parents.
Nowadays, adults are more independent comparing to the past. In this regard, while some persons hold an opinion that youngsters need their parents in order to make decisions, others believe that they can do their jobs based on their opinions. As far as I am concerned, there is no need for parents because not only are adults knowledgeable enough, but they also can ask their problems from the experts. In the following, I will explore my reasons.
First and foremost, because youngsters are more educated than before, they do not need their parents anymore. For more clarification, thank to advance of the net, people can search what is questionable for them based on the trustful resources. By regarding this fact, the more they study and search, the more they will be independent. For instance, if a man is searching for a proper job based on his talents, he will search the sites related to suitable carriers. Moreover, based on the tests which are assigned for figuring out the people's capability, they could be aware that in which area they are more capable. Had they not had accessed to this, they could have been more dependent on the limited knowledge of their parents which in some cases lead to failure.
Secondly, the adults can make a decision without knowing their parents’ ideas because there are more expert people who can help precisely and logically, not emotionally. In other words, needing help for understanding how to address the problems make many children be dependent on their parents, while there are more knowledgeable people who can show the best way to face those challenges. By considering this fact, people can be aware of the consequences of their problems based on the idea of wise persons. Take my personal experience as an example. I remember when I was in high school and I wanted to choose the major which is suitable for me. At first, my parents told me to choose math because you are able to solve the questions easily and you can have an appropriate job with a large amount of salary. Despite not liking this major, I trusted my parents and respect their opinion. After one year of studying math, I could not be satisfied because of the tough situation which I experienced. After a while, I talked to a psychologist to help me deal with this problem. As a consequence, I changed my major to art which I had been living it since my childhood. Now, I am one of the best painters in my country who have a well-known gallery, and a lot of people buy my art at a high price. Besides, I earn a lot more money comparing to an engineer.
All in all, in my opinion, adults do not need the parents to make their decisions because they are wise enough and can ask help from expert people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...which are assigned for figuring out the peoples capability, they could be aware that in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in my opinion, in other words, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65975103734 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65616889689 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473029045643 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5471255155 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.652173913 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9565217391 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211556140832 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603585168861 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712817965113 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142903277097 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271811354568 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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