Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and modern era that we live, the mass social media, like television, have been having a significant influence on individuals' lives. In this regard, while some people hold the opinion that movies on television can negatively impact people, others, on the other side of the continuum, believe that its positive influence is crystal clear. As far as I am concerned, young people can positively be affected by social media especially television because not only do they have fun, they also will be more educated by it. In the following, I will elaborate on my reasons.
First and foremost, people could spend their spare time watching movies while they are enjoying it. What is more, although there are other ways of having fun such as playing music, go hiking, many prefer to watch television because they enjoy it so much. Consequently, by watching movies, people would rest and relax, and it could be a way for the outlet of the stress. Take my personal experience as an example. I remember when I was working on my project in for a long time. Because of being engaged in one of the most important projects, I did not have enough time to travel or playing sports. Rather than doing nothing except working, I chose to watch the serial named "Friends" every night. Besides of separating my mind from work, I laughed a lot due to its comedy theme. Having watched that serial, I was more fresh and full of energy compared to the times that I just worked. In fact, had I not watched the serial, I would have been depressed and exhausted of absolute work.
Last but not least, watching some channel of television teach people many lessons which would be useful. For more clarification, by watching the documentary shows on television, people would learn a lot rather than searching on some untrusted sites. By keeping this on the mind, reading the books may be boring and elaborated for some people, while they could easily listen and watch them on some movies which lead to being stuck more on the minds. An example of my personal life can drive this notion to home. For entering university I had to take a hard exam, accordingly, I had to study as hard and precise as possible. Never I could concentrate very well while I was studying. Fortunately, on television, there was a program which was for students like me. Thank that program, I could be prepared for the exam because of its best way of teaching the courses. For instance, they devise many ways in order to explain the chemical reaction in a chemistry lesson. Furthermore, psychologically speaking, when people learn the phenomena visually, the notions would have stuck into minds more deeply and strongly. As a consequence, I could remember them easily, and I was more interested to study. The more I spend the time to watch that program, the more I was educated, and, as a result, I got a better mark rather than my friends who just studied the books.
All in all, by taking all the reasons and examples into consideration, watching television can be more beneficial rather than negatively affect the youngsters. It would provide a vast array of programs for all different tastes which let them have more pleasure time and learn many new notions in an attractive manner. As a matter of fact, who can ignore the pleasure time while they were watching cartoons when they were children?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an attractive manner" with adverb for "attractive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...leasure time and learn many new notions in an attractive manner. As a matter of fact, who can ignore th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, well, while, as for, for instance, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2816.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 589.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78098471986 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68401990713 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490662139219 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 886.5 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7971217271 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1034482759 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3103448276 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1724137931 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208485980003 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544045432344 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490696303769 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141223737111 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399860975216 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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