people should know about the news.
In this sophisticated world that we live, events have been happening in which may be no need to get involved. In this regard, while some people hold this view that know all the events that take place around the world, others cast doubt on this idea, and believe that people should be away from what does not related to them. As far as I am concerned, individuals should be curious in what happens around them even if it is none of their business because not only do they have many issues to talk, but they also could help some events to take place less. In the following, I will elaborate on my reasons.
First and foremost, when persons are aware of what happens around them, they can express their opinions in society. Unless this, discussing the issues which they are not knowledgeable about making them be silent. Consequently, they have nothing to say in the groups. In fact, the more people be aware of the nowadays news, the more they can talk about with their friends. Take my personal experience as an example. I remember when I was an 18-years-old girl who did not care about the elections in my country. By being allowed to vote, many of my friends discuss the proper president and even they had many disputes. Not being interested in political issues made me so far from the groups. After a while, I decided to follow the news of presidents and I searched the net about the biography of them. Because of doing this works, I became knowledgeable and talked a lot about them with my friends and family. Had I not been involved in selecting an appropriate president, I would not have had anything to talk about.
Secondly, by knowing the news, people can contribute as much as they can in the activity related to increasing the problems. For more clarification, in case one dilemma happens in a country, there may be some experts who could fix the problems, but because they do not get involved in that events, they could not help anymore. Having been notified of the events, many experts would easily solve the problems and decrease their influence in society. For example, when an earthquake takes place in Kermanshah, Iran, a lot of doctors, engineers and psychologist went there in order to help as much s possible. They could erect many resistant and sturdy buildings to have better resiliency because of being exposed to more earthquakes. Furthermore, there were many children who lost their families, and with the help of the psychologist, they could tolerate the situation better. Other people gave a lot of blankets and foods for surviving them. Finally, because people care about what happens to the people who were the victim of the earthquake, they could pass the harsh circumstances very well.
All in all, by taking into account the reasons and discussions mentioned before, people should know what takes place around them. With keep this into our minds, people can be more up-to-date and helpful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'relate'
Suggestion: relate
...eople should be away from what does not related to them. As far as I am concerned, indi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77120315582 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56423304174 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477317554241 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9199488491 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.76 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.28 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225678497529 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063121905434 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760065163794 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146918207743 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238584847869 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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