Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throghout the years, a question which is a matter of debates, is, whether television and movies have negative influence on young people behave or not. It`s a little hard to reach a consensus, because it`s deponds on many factors, however, in numerous circles of reseachres and experts, whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that movies and television baring many negative effects for young people. On the other extreme of the rope, opponents believe they are efficient for young people behave. While both sides have their own position, from my vantage point the first attitude carries more weight. In what follows I will delve into some conspicuous aspects which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
To begin, the first point I want to make is that, if they watch action or violent films they become angry and sometimes savage. They always remeber those acts and want to do them, also they can damage to someone or themselves in order to repeat those acts. Negative effects can cause many stuggle in the school or even they sleep. My own experience is a compelling example that what I mean. When I was a child, I watched a very rough movie that since now I remeber every parts of that film. When I wanted to sleep I remembered and dreamed it, also I afraid if my parents turned off the lights, Indeed, I afraid from darkness.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate and indicate my stand point concering this issue is that, if young people spend many times on television, they become lazy, they can`t live without television, actully they become television addicted, thus, they don`t do theri homework or study, eventually they waste many time. They can use those time to reading a book or do healthy activities, such as attending to the sport clubs and etc. My little brother is one of the person that became a televions addicted. Based on what I mentioned he doesn`t do their homework and study, so all of his grades is disappointed. My parents are always concern and upset about him.
Drawin upon the reasons, although there are always some exception which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that, television and movies have more negative effects on young people. To recapitulate the reasons, some movies help to young people to become violent and angry, also it gets many times from them and bring them addiction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, thus, whereas, while, i mean, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87223587224 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50594256561 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547911547912 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.068066554 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.166666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189177471972 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589898615775 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620180402037 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12882124224 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070319743316 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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