Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Through the years, a question which is matter of debates, a controversial one, is, whether it`s important to know about events that occurred aroud the word or not. It`s a little hard to reach a consensus about this issue, however, in numerous circles of experts and researchers, whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that, it`s essential to aware about events happening around the world. On the other extreme of the rope, opponents believe, it`s not important to know what happened around the word. Wile both sides have their own positions, from my vantage point, the latter attitude carries more weight. I will explain bellow.
To begin, the first point I`d like to make is that, events, specially disasters or bad news distract you from your activities. Bad news can influence to you and make you upset. Let me illustrate that in other word. Last month I watched a news about killing young people and child by savages. I always remember that news and pictures and they don`t let to me focus on my lessons when I want to study.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiates and indicates my stand point concerning this issue is that, news can brings addict and get lots of your time for spending on it. My father`s experience is a compelling example that what I mean. My father is a news addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the news, read about or what the news channel such as, BBC, VOA and etc. I believe he can spend his time on other activities instead of news. For example, read books, go the gym or even watch any thing else on tv, like, National Geography to increase his knowledge.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exception which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that, it`s not important to spend your time on news and events happening around the world. To recapitulate the reasons, not only news and awareness about your around world distract you from your main activity, but, prevent you to spending your time on practical activities. Also you may become news addicted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...hat in other word. Last month I watched a news about killing young people and child by...
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Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...concerning this issue is that, news can brings addict and get lots of your time for sp...
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Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'since the wake'?
Suggestion: since the wake
...hat I mean. My father is a news addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the...
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Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wakes'.
Suggestion: wakes
...n. My father is a news addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the...
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Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...s addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the news, read about o...
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Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'listens'.
Suggestion: listens
...since he wake up until night. he always listen to the news, read about or what the new...
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Line 5, column 395, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...what the news channel such as, BBC, VOA and etc. I believe he can spend his time on othe...
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Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...e, read books, go the gym or even watch any thing else on tv, like, National Geography to...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ding your time on practical activities. Also you may become news addicted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, second, so, whereas, for example, i mean, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82825484765 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51259211657 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567867036011 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7600127022 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7368421053 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207893822663 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610109417611 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618334284139 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133485976525 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796012244373 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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