Community is one of the important aspects of our lives. We grow among other people and earn our progress in communities. Some people think that nowadays young people do not give enough time to helping their communities, Others disagree. In my view, young people put so much thought and energy on this and spend adequate time to helping their communities for two important reasons.
First, with the advent of technology, they must spend more time on success. Since the world is complicated than before, young people must spend so much time to climb them up. For example, I study Industrial engineering at Tabriz University. two years ago I had an assignment about Control Project and I searched to find related articles. I found a few articles and finished my paper. In this semester, I take the same subject for my final project. But this time when I searched about that subject, I fount a lot of articles and some of them did the exact idea that I thought about that. As a result, I have to study more and prepare a more difficult paper. This experience taught me that when the world moves forward, you have to try harder and spend more time to reach it. If you do not. you can not help your community.
Second, I think the world was more simple before. Since the world grows fast, you have to come up with this situation and try hard at least in my country. For instance, There was a lot of free lands that people could cultivate there and improve their lives. But today all of the lands belong to someone and you can not earn it. From this, I think that life was very simple before and today you have to try harder and spend so much time to gain success and so help your communities.
In sum, I think young people put so much thought and energy on this and spend adequate time to helping their communities. Not only with the advent of technology, they must spend more time to success, but also the world was more simple before. I think all of us must try hard and spend so much time in order to help our communities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, at least, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45430107527 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32722274795 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440860215054 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.901356136 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0434782609 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1739130435 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299966154934 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894513810375 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139623513061 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222638977877 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.177270850756 0.0645574589148 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.64 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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