Young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life. Do you agree or disagree.
One of the most important issue in anybody's life is getting a job. Opinion are divided as to whether people should try many different kinds of jobs or careers before they decide the long term careers of their life or not. Personally speaking, I am of the opinion that experiencing a diverse range of jobs is much more beneficial for young people due to some reasons.I will elaborate upon the momentous reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first point worth mentioning would be that the more jobs the young experience, the further knowledge they would accumulate. It is crystal-clear that different jobs require different skills and knowledge; when the young get several jobs, they would be able to enrich their knowledge in different fields. A prime example of my father's experience may shade some light on this point. While studying in university, he was working as a freelancer in several different companies such as a photographer, computer programmer and tutor, to name but a few. Having worked in several fundamentally different jobs, he gained monumental amount of knowledge and skills useful for her future job. Tanks to his previous experiences, he can be useful in different fields such as taking photos, teaching school material to us and so on. In a word, a diverse rang of jobs can be useful for them in the future.
There is a more subtle point we must consider. Should young get several different career before choosing their long-term career, they would be able to choose the best jobs on account of their talents and their experiences. To exemplify, my father wanted to care a niche for his self in the future, so he tried to secure a place in one of the country's most prestigious seats of learning to study since. After taking several courses, he started to work in university' laboratory. While working in the lab, he understood he was born not with a genetic flair for science. Not only did he change his major to art, but also he started to work as a freelancer to realize his potential even more. Eventually, he understood that he is talented in web designing. Deeming had not he worked in several different majors at that time, he would have not been able to realize his potential. Hence, working in different majors is the best way for finding the best career in the future.
In the final analysis, according to above-mentioned points and examples, working in different jobs, as a young, is the key to carve a niche for ourselves in the future inasmuch as it will be helpful to build up strength knowledge in a good many fields. Besides, the young would be able to recognize their gifts and talents while working in different careers as a young which would is a key to choose the most appropriate job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Suggestion: several
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Suggestion: several
...designing. Deeming had not he worked in several different majors at that time, he would have not ...
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...ifferent careers as a young which would is a key to choose the most appropriate jo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, may, so, while, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78481012658 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72069133393 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474683544304 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.854848168 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289053380045 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094266266419 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155406627449 0.0737576698707 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218861684663 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132548075848 0.0645574589148 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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