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your city is trying to attract more tourists, which one you suggest by building
a historical museums
indoor amusement parks
shopping mall

Attracting tourists is always a big concern for developing cities like my city Nouakchott. If I were asked to give my opinion about which one would be the best choice for Nouakchott to attract more visitors, I would definetely suggest constructing a historical museum rather than building a shopping mall or indoor amusement park for a couple of reasons that I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, a historical museum enables Noukchott's visitors to learn about my country's history and culture. For example, the history of Adrar is an oustanding picture of the way that our previous generations lived. If visitors get the chance to learn about oisis of Adrar and see pictures of men climbing trees to get the dates, they will definitely enjoy their vacations and probably will share their good memories with families or friends. In addition, tourists tend to publish their good times on social medias which in turn can appeal more and more visitors.

Moreover, tourist usually don't come to a small city like Nouackchott to enjoy shopping malls or amusement parks. However, tourists are passionate about other cultures, especially when they are way diffirent than their native ones, My friend from Canada is a good example of this. Sumera visited Nouakchott back in 2016 and I took her to few shpping centers and parks, but it didn't seem to be something important to her. In contrast, she talked to me about how she had a good time in Dakar a year before that when she visited Sandaga historical museum of Senegal and even showed me pictures that made me wish to get the chance to go there one day.
To sum up, for reasons mentioned above I would encourage my city to build historical museum to attract tourists istead of trying to appeal them by costructing shopping centers or amusement parks.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, for example, in addition, in contrast, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88064516129 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61131174153 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577419354839 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9393660873 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.545454545 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1818181818 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316690198432 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111440523648 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108943793718 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20802872804 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113124131058 0.0645574589148 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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