Your community has a piece of land and is considering introducing a business to this land
Currently, due to the development of society, people are attaching increasing importance to living qualities. Meanwhile, the authority is also concerned with introducing a business to local communities. Some individuals reckon that a performing centered ought to be erected in a spare land, while others suggest hotel is the top priority when deciding which construction is supposed to be erected. Personally speaking, I cannot concur with the above opinions. From my perspective, introducing the business of shopping mall is the optimal choice and there are a couple of reasons to account for my view.
To start with, since the shopping mall is capable of accommodating residents’ basic needs, erecting a shopping mall near the community enables individuals there to enhance their living standards. To be more specific, nowadays, due to the progressively increasing incomes, citizens’ purchasing power is greatly improved, thus they have the desires to purchase more commodities in higher qualities, which generates the desire of building a shopping mall. The research conducted to evaluate people’s willingness of which kind of business should be introduced demonstrates that most residents, for the sake of purchasing basic necessities, are more willing to utilize the spare land as a shopping mall. Meanwhile, they also reckon that the shopping mall renders them with multiple choices. With regard to their desires of erecting a hotel or a performance center, they contend that owing to the development of technology, performance is available online for free, thus instead of watching a performance in the performance center charging expensive fees, watching the performance at home with families is their preferred choice. In addition, the revolution in traffic vehicles also enables individuals to commute easily, which apparently diminish individuals’ need to live in a hotel.
What’s more, confronted with the severe problem of the skyrocketing unemployment rate, introducing a shopping mall is capable of alleviating the problems. To be more specific, since a shopping mall consists of diversified components, each of them can offer some posts to the labor market. Therefore, as the saying goes, many a little makes a mickle, the problem of unemployment can be progressively addressed, which also ameliorates the government’s burden on distributing fund to accommodate the unemployed individuals’ basic living necessities. For instance, one of my neighbors, Rebecca, had lost her jobs before a shopping mall was constructed in our community, therefore she was plagued with the financial burden. Consequently, with the construction of the shopping mall, she was introduced to a lot of posts by the community’s workers, eventually, she was qualified for a salesman job in a market with a stable income. This example illuminates that introducing a shopping mall business to the community contributes to the unemployed group and reinforces the stability of the community due to the effect on preventing individuals from committing crimes.
Admittedly, constructing a performance center or hotel also has its perks. For instance, a performance center renders some citizens the opportunities to enhance their appreciating aptitude or a place to relieve pressure, while a hotel provides residents’ relatives for a house to live. Nevertheless, these kinds of desires are not widespread, which means they are not entitled to address the problems faced with the community.
In a nutshell, introducing the business of a shopping mall is the optimal option, due to its function in accommodating residents’ needs and addressing unemployment issues.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 632, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...t residents, for the sake of purchasing basic necessities, are more willing to utilize the spare ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, kind of, to start with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3143.0 1977.66487455 159% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65287769784 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43603846129 2.67179642975 129% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489208633094 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 991.8 618.680645161 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.63914113 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.666666667 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4761904762 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04761904762 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107312900399 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382393866065 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542788504568 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0696628741153 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422044274071 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 58.1214874552 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 10.9000537634 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 86.8835125448 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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