Your local government has just recently received a large donation from an anonymous donor to improve
the community. Almost everyone agrees that the money should be invested in building a new public
facility. Which of the following do you think your local government should build?
- Build a public library
- Build a public park
- Build a public pool
A local government must provide a safe environment for its residents. There are various methods in order to complete their jobs, such as building parks, public schools, larger shops, and other kinds of facilities. Evidently, different people have different needs. For example, the elderly would prefer parks to health gyms. Meanwhile, teenagers would favor skateboard areas over playgrounds. Therefore, if money had to be invested in building a new public building, I would suggest establishing a public library. I feel this way for the following reasons, which I will discuss in the subsequent few paragraphs.
First, drawing from my own experience, public libraries are widely used by all ages, from children to the elderly. When I visited South Korea, I was surprised to observe and explore a public library that was well-built and utilized by all generations. I really thought it was an incredible idea to have sections in the building, allowing college students to research computers, high school students to study on the second floor, children to hear story-telling, and the elderly to play chess while listening to audios. Consequently, a public library would be best if one wants all people to enjoy it, despite the age gap.
Second, it gives a person wider academic and entertainment opportunities. Putting my point into perspective, libraries are usually known for reading books. However, with the large donation, I am deeply convinced that it can be more than that in many aspects. Aside from books, the library can provide citizens with devices, DVDs, clubs, study rooms, activities, and many more. For instance, there could be a writing club, book review discussion, spelling competition, and other various types of events. It is crystal clear that a library can give a variety of things, similar to a park and a pool, but more.
To sum up, I believe a public library is the best option since it is likely to be loved by everyone regardless of their age. It can also provide academic doors alongside entertainment through public lectures, indoor activities, and campaigns. The local government should spend its money on constructing a library rather than a park and pool to enhance the quality of life of the natives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cuss in the subsequent few paragraphs. First, drawing from my own experience, p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13698630137 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8611923157 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602739726027 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.706151702 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.75 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148209850102 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040622061817 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453286748366 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0890518425925 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433397995364 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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