Your local government has just recently received a large donation from an anonymous donor to improve
the community. Almost everyone agrees that the money should be invested in building a new public
facility. Which of the following do you think your local government should build?
- Build a public library
- Build a public park
- Build a public pool
The duty of a local government is to provide a safe environment for the residential. There are various methods in order to complete their jobs such as building parks, public schools, larger shops, and other kinds of facilities. Evidently, different people needs different needs, for example, elders would prefer parks over a health gym. Meanwhile, teenagers would favor skateboard area over playground. Accordingly, I personally think that constructing a public library is the best option if money had to be invested in building a new public building. I feel this way for the following reasons, which I will discuss in the next paragraphs.
First, drawing from my own experience, public library is widely used by all ages from children to elders. When I visited South Korea, I was surprised to observe and visit a public library that was well- built and utilized by all generations. I really thought it was an awesome idea to have sections in the building, allowing college students to do research in computers, high school students study in the second floor, children hearing story- telling, and elders playing chess while listening to audios. Consequently, a public library would be the best if one wants all people to enjoy it, despite age gap.
Second, it gives a person wider academic and entertainment opportunities. To illustrate my point, usually libraries are known for reading books. However, with the large donation I strongly hold the idea that it can more than that in many aspects. Aside from books, the library can provide citizens the access to devices, DVDs, clubs, studying rooms, activities, and many more. For instance, there could be a writing club, book review discussion, spelling competition, and other various types of events. It is crystal clear that a library can give a variety of things likewise to a park and pool, but more.
To sum up, I affirm a public library is the best choice considering that it will high likely be loved by all people of age. It can also provide academic doors along with entertainment through public lecture, indoor activities, and campaign. Taking account of the two reasons mentioned, the local government should invest in building a public library to improve the quality of life of the inhabitants rather than a park and pool.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 430, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nhabitants rather than a park and pool.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, likewise, really, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06332453826 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75366444964 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591029023747 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4118224384 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9473684211 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.10526315789 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163652605099 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465527591443 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538371008383 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987546132649 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487392439782 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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