“Youth is wasted on the young”
Agree or Disagree
“Youth is wasted on the young”, This old proverb means that the young people are tend to waste the time of young age. In fact, many people including me spent the time to play video games ,sports, and read comic books. However, I do not claim that it was the waste of the time. The things I got from the act of them help me a lot in many way.
First at all, actually I had spent much time to play video games, however I realized that the experience helps to my life. For example, I started to part-time work at the retail store, when I was a freshman. I was so overwhelmed, because that was the first time to work for me, also I had to memorize a lot of manuals for work and communicate with co-workers. But the experience of the video game helped me, I realized the solution was same as the game. The work time was limited, so I made a strategy to solve problem by making a list I should to do. It was the same way that I used to use the strategy when I played video games. The communication with the people was also same thing.
Second, a old Japanese proverb, “the time when you want to start is the most appropriate time”, means that if you want to start something, it is not too late. The founder of the Kentucky fried chicken, Colonel Sanders, he started the company at 65 years old. This faction proves that if you have things that you want to start, the time is the best time to start it.
To sum up, I strongly disagree the statement that youth is wasted on the young. If you keep the young spirit, there is not the obstacle to start something.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...proverb means that the young people are tend to waste the time of young age. In fact...
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Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... In fact, many people including me spent the time to play video games ,sports, an...
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Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...g me spent the time to play video games ,sports, and read comic books. However, I...
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Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun way seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ways'.
Suggestion: many ways
...t from the act of them help me a lot in many way. First at all, actually I had spent m...
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Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e people was also same thing. Second, a old Japanese proverb, 'the time wh...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...5 years old. This faction proves that if you have things that you want to start, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.25581395349 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37439515302 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498338870432 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.0 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0312342648 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0625 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186219287486 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695293835977 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141250526366 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159805866898 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125704941285 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.43 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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