Although the sale of rhinoceros horns is illegal worldwide, rhinoceroses (Rhinos) are commonly poached (hunted illegally) for their horns, which can be sold for tens of thousands of dollars per kilogram. Rhino horns are so valuable that one type of rhino is already extinct because poachers killed too many of them. All rhinos may soon become extinct unless something is done to help save them. Several ideas have been suggested
The first idea is for wildlife experts to “dehorn" Rhinos living in the wild. Dehorning means removing the horns of living rhinos to make them less attractive to poachers Horns can be removed without hurting the animals if medical equipment and drugs to calm the animals are used When this strategy was tried on a small scale in the early 1990s; none of the rhinos dehorned at the time were killed by poachers.
The second possibility is to educate consumers. The majority of rhino horn sold is used in medicines Although rhino horn is believed to have health benefits, this belief has no scientific foundation Rhino horn consists almost entirely of keratin, the same material found in human hair and nails. Keratin has no known health value. Educating consumers about keratin could greatly decrease the demand for rhino horn
The third possibility is to legalize government sales of rhino horn. Some governments have large amounts of horn, taken from poachers they have arrested This horn is often kept in storage. However, if government sales were legal, large quantities of horn that governments already have could be sold at very low prices Poachers kill rhinos because consumers pay high prices for their horns If governments started selling cheap rhino horn, rhino poaching would no longer be profitable and would probably stop, at least for a while. That might help endangered rhino populations to recover.
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss the workability of some solutions for problem of hunting rhinoceros for their horns. In the reading part, the author mentions that there are three remarkable solutions that affect selling and buying Rhinos; however, in the listening part, the lecturer challenges what the author states and rebuts the reasons, citing that they have weaknesses.
To begin with, as mentioned in the article, the author sets forth that during the process of surgery, doctors can remove the horns; therefore, it will reduce the desire to kill and sell the horns, as it happened in 1990s. Nevertheless, the professor refutes the idea asserting that the horns of animals protect them from disaster when they are young. Moreover, it utilizes to prevent their realms and also for drinking water. Thus the horns play a crucial role in survival of the animal, so have good reason behind it.
Secondly, the author points out that people want the horn because its capability for medical treatments. if they inform about the benefits of other materials which include Keratin, main material which is in the horns, people would not buy the horns any more. Nonetheless, the lecturer flatly contradicts the idea and contends that individuals use the horns because they think it will heal them, and this idea came from ancient times. it would be very difficult if we attempt to alter the idea; in addition, it is a very strong belief. therefore, it would not be practical.
Finally, the author claims that if the government legalizes the selling, the price would drop, and hunters do not hunt animals anymore. In contrast, the professor is of the opinion that governments should not legalize the selling because the price would increase, and demands for buying would heighten too. In fact, the larger demands, the more killing animals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in contrast, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 306.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07516339869 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44989300498 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3638469654 49.2860985944 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.928571429 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2142857143 7.06452816374 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151692245896 0.272083759551 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530487053943 0.0996497079465 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416773844895 0.0662205650399 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0858041666481 0.162205337803 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356765890687 0.0443174109184 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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