Altruism

Essay topics:

Altruism

The reading and the lecture are both about altruism like a kind of behavior that we can see on human beings and animals. Whereas the author of the reading states that we can find several cases of altruism in the animal world. The professor suggest that is not usually find out cases of altruism among animals or humans as well. The lecture casts doubt on the main point made in the reading by providing three reasons.

First of all, according to the reading, in the cases of human we can find out altruism acts when someone donate a body organs to another person like a relative or even to strangers. However, the lecturer disputes this point. She says that when someone donate a body organ, they do not receive anything. Furthermore, she mentions that person, who donate the body organ, does not feel well with this act since they cannot choose who they will donate the organ.

Secondly, the article posits that meerkat are a species who appear to act altruistically, because a sentinel is looking out for a predator when the others are hunting food and eating that they gathered. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. She argues that the sentinel is the first that can the chance to escape when it sees a predator. In addition, she point out the sentinel eat before to stand guard so it is not an altruism act like the reading explain.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...we can see on human beings and animals. Whereas the author of the reading states that w...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...uism in the animal world. The professor suggest that is not usually find out cases of a...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'donates'.
Suggestion: donates
...can find out altruism acts when someone donate a body organs to another person like a ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'organ'?
Suggestion: organ
...ltruism acts when someone donate a body organs to another person like a relative or ev...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'donates'.
Suggestion: donates
... this point. She says that when someone donate a body organ, they do not receive anyth...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'points'.
Suggestion: points
...en it sees a predator. In addition, she point out the sentinel eat before to stand gu...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, in addition, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1118.0 1373.03311258 81% => OK
No of words: 239.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67782426778 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36701036062 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531380753138 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.454876553 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1666666667 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18655397105 0.272083759551 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794612312135 0.0996497079465 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953226071572 0.0662205650399 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137046843658 0.162205337803 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857196445514 0.0443174109184 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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