Altruism
<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">The reading and the lecture both about Altruism. The author of the reading feels that Altruism means animals sacrifice their interests for other animals and this kind of behavior is found in many animals. The lecturer challenges the claims made by author. She is </span>of the opinion that<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> no one is altruist.
To begin with, the author gives an example of humans. He says that human shares food with strangers and </span>donate<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> body organs. Such an act is </span>an example<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> of altruism. This specific argument </span>is challenged by the<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> lecturer. She points out that when human donates a kidney to other people, he gets appreciation </span><span style="font-size: 19.36px;">from</span><span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> society as well as a feeling of self-worthiness. Human gets this kind of nonmaterial rewards. So this is not altruism.
Secondly, the author gives an example of a meerkat animal. He posits that meerkat sacrifices his own food for other members and stands guard looking for predator. The lecturer, however, </span><span style="font-size: 19.36px;">rebuts</span><span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> this by mentioning that the close examination reveals that the guard who stands to look for predators always with full stomach. She elaborates this point by bringing up the point that guard is most likely to escape faster than other members of animals.</span><br>
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shares'' or 'share's'?
Suggestion: shares'; share's
...n example of humans. He says that human shares food with strangers and donate
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, kind of, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 218.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.57339449541 5.08290768461 129% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.32021702561 2.5805825403 206% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 126.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577981651376 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.5189200834 49.2860985944 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5333333333 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5333333333 21.698381199 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.077284798767 0.272083759551 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063631231102 0.0996497079465 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122962776416 0.0662205650399 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074624397466 0.162205337803 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627053033429 0.0443174109184 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.3589403974 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 20.23 12.2367328918 165% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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