Altruism

Essay topics:

Altruism

The reading and the lecture both about Altruism. The author of the reading feels that Altruism means animal sacrifices its interests for other animals and it is found in many animals. The lecturer challenges the claims made by author. She is of the opinion that no one is altruist.

To begin with, the author gives example of human. He says that human shares food with strangers, donate body organs. Such act is a example of altruism. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. She points out that when human donate kidney to other person, he gets appreciation form society as well as feeling of self worthiness. Human gets this kind of non material rewards. So this is not altruism.

Secondly, the author gives example of meerkat animal. He posits that meerkat sacrifice his own food for other members and stand guard looking for predator. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by mentioning that the close examination reveals that the guard which stand looking for predators always is full of stomach. She elaborates this point by bringing up the point that guard is most likely to escape faster than other members of animals.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nimals and it is found in many animals. The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
^^^
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shares'' or 'share's'?
Suggestion: shares'; share's
...es example of human. He says that human shares food with strangers, donate body organs...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...angers, donate body organs. Such act is a example of altruism. This specific argu...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, kind of, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 1373.03311258 70% => OK
No of words: 192.0 270.72406181 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97395833333 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42329707353 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 419.366225166 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7894191818 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.6666666667 110.228320801 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.8 21.698381199 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1722182412 0.272083759551 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893145738424 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156999549204 0.0662205650399 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129618833334 0.162205337803 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0963374409056 0.0443174109184 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.3589403974 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.7273730684 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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