Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

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Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

According to the proffessor's opinion, there are some reasonns which can reject the exist theories about remaining some parts of the animal blooding system:
Archealogist have found a fossil, related to tissues era; Breaking leg's bones shows some empty holes in them and some soft textiles; The main assertion about this observation is that they are channels which vessels (cause of proving vessel existance) had been there. The proffessor have said that the holes can be created by bacteria and the soft material can be debris of their colony.
The other reason that some scientist rely on it to prove remaining of the blooding system, is that some red sphere objects can be seen in the bones which contain Iron and they can be signs of blood cells. The proffessor idea is that the objects have been finding in other recent animals fossils (animals which had been living later than the discussing fossil). So it cann't be a strong evidance that imply the discussing subject

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n and they can be signs of blood cells. The proffessor idea is that the objects ha...
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... be signs of blood cells. The proffessor idea is that the objects have been findi...
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...ea is that the objects have been finding in other recent animals fossils animals ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 30.3222958057 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 806.0 1373.03311258 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 165.0 270.72406181 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88484848485 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 4.04702891845 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32482510179 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 145.348785872 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 419.366225166 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 21.2450331126 155% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.972191979 49.2860985944 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 161.2 110.228320801 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 21.698381199 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 7.06452816374 6% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151067525816 0.272083759551 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091077850317 0.0996497079465 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124702007921 0.0662205650399 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101984816033 0.162205337803 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538322053509 0.0443174109184 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.3589403974 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 63.6247240618 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.7273730684 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.498013245 145% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.2008830022 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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