Animal Intelligence
Both the reading and the listening passages talk about animal intelligence. The passage states that the ability of an animal to recognize itself determines its intelligence. The professor supports this information by adding that the animal intelligence is relative to the way it empathises with other animals. The professor argued an animal's empathy is measured by the way the animal perceive itself as an individual.
The reading passage provides examples of animal intelligence. First, it stated a study was done on chimpanze. The chimpanzes watched of video of others chimpanzes and they could feel happiness or fear according to the experience of the other chimpanzes in the video. The professor supports this example by confirming that chimpanzes are among the only animals to recognize themselves.
The passage also discussed the way mirrors were used to test intelligence. The professor elaborates on this points by illustrating an experiment. He reported that in the study made with mirrors, dophins were marked. The dophins felt the marks, and when they were present the mirror, all dophins that felt the touch of the marks rushed to see what had been done to them. Some dophins, in fact, were not actually marked. Those who had a real mark got closer to the mirror to examine their marks closely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e way it empathises with other animals. The professor argued an animals empathy is ...
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Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... other animals. The professor argued an animals empathy is measured by the way the anim...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...mal perceive itself as an individual. The reading passage provides examples of an...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...only animals to recognize themselves. The passage also discussed the way mirrors ...
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Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...mirrors were used to test intelligence. The professor elaborates on this points by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, so, in fact, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1097.0 1373.03311258 80% => OK
No of words: 213.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15023474178 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81142660459 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553990610329 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0391180813 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3571428571 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2142857143 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 7.06452816374 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233425639153 0.272083759551 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784283054195 0.0996497079465 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979652310168 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160444871789 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1556149453 0.0443174109184 351% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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