Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
There is no shortage of opinions that it is not essential for youth to be organized and well-planned. I have a different opinion.I strongly believe that the young people must be systematized in order to live a successful life in this modern era.In the following essay, I intended to put forth my points and reasons for support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that if our younger generation utilize their precious time in a systematic way, they will be more productive. Moreover, when they have this ability of doing assigned tasks in a timely manner, they will be more focused on their studies like submitting assignments on time. As a result, they will perform extraordinarily in the academics which in turn give them better job opportunities.To exemplify, one of my perhigh school colleague always struggles with his assignments and exam preparations due to lack of organization. However, when he discusses his issue with me, I recommend him to plan all the work ahead of time in a proper way.Evidently, as he applied my advice, his grades have taken a drastic shift and now he is a top notch dentist. Therefore, this example illustrates how managing stuff is important in this fast paced lifestyle.
Secondly, to explain broadly, when a new generation doesn't have the capability of doing work in a sequence, they may develop an imbalance in their social and professional life. Consequently, they become depressed and stressed out because they don't have any time to socialize. Eventually, they lose their sincere friends and become distant from their family. For instance, it is best explained by my own personal experience, when I started my job I failed to handle my work and family equilibrium. As a consequence, I suffer from severe anxiety and depression.Thus, this experience taught me that if I had tackled my life in an organized way then I would not have gone through that rough patch of my life as these modern times are more complicated than the older ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... generation utilize their precious time in a systematic way, they will be more productive. Moreover...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 22.412803532 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 335.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95820895522 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03412535753 2.5805825403 118% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 145.348785872 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608955223881 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 3.25607064018 461% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 1.25165562914 559% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.0703006455 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.416666667 110.228320801 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9166666667 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4166666667 7.06452816374 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180965773891 0.272083759551 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623370846289 0.0996497079465 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622197844215 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139158119329 0.162205337803 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082007190519 0.0443174109184 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 63.6247240618 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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