Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is hard to deny that some movies and television can teach young people various knowledge and such a fact leads impressionable people to generate that watching movies have a positive impact on youth's behaviors. However, such a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. As far as, physical health, psychology, and economic safety are concerned, I strongly hold that television has a negative influence on how young people are behaving.
First and foremost, watching movies are harmful to our body, as staring the screen for a long time will definitly hurt one's eyes. To be specific, my eyes cannot get sufficient relax when I am watching TV programs, which my eyes' pressure is much higher than usual. The frequent vary between eye's pressure should lead to several eyes diseases. Not to mention that after stoping watching television, teenagers can have more time to play with their friends or do exercise, which can enhance their ability to cooperate and can keep their shapes.
Futhermore, the fact that young people are easy to be lured by the advertisement indicates that it may increase the risk of getting cheated of their money online.Take the case of my cousin, John, who always watches movies or TV shows when he is in spare time. As his parents are busy with their work, they do not have time to take care of him. John was attracted by a toy advertisement being shown on the television and used my uncle's credit card to pay for it without my uncle's permission. As a result, my uncle discovered that he has an unrecognized money outflow after 3 weeks as he received a loan receipt from the bank. Had it not been for John lured by the advertisement from the TV show, he would never use his father's money to buy it without any permission.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that young people can get helps from movies and television for their future career development. Ironically, the fact that it is hard to distinguish movies that are favorable for the youth to watch as some of them contain violent scene that will damage young people's mental health against that gaining variety of knowledge from movies can let children to discover their interest. Therefore, teenagers' psychology may be harmed by watching movies.
In a nutshell, I maintain that young people who watch movies and television regularly may have a negative consequence rather than a positive one. Admittedly, as my favorite quote from James Madison goes, as long as the reason of man contributes fallible, different opinions will be formed, and some people opposes me. However, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 5.04856512141 337% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 22.412803532 228% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1373.03311258 163% => OK
No of words: 452.0 270.72406181 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94247787611 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71415366548 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 145.348785872 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530973451327 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 419.366225166 166% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6567752604 49.2860985944 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.111111111 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1111111111 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 7.06452816374 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171429427829 0.272083759551 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057922444955 0.0996497079465 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595209574469 0.0662205650399 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108325993464 0.162205337803 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448685935086 0.0443174109184 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 63.6247240618 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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