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Essay topics: electronic medical record storage

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The article discusses a fascinating topic pertaining to upsides of electronic databases to store medical information and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that all claims regarding this method is uncertain and opposes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading passage mention that reducing cost is possible due to in electronic system, there is no need for space for paper record as well as no transferring effort. In contrary, the professor provides information that saving money is unrealistic. She states that even doctors who are adopt the computer, still use paper report in order for backup and legal requirement. Clearly, a disparity exists between the article and the evidence exhibited by the professor. As a result, we can safely assume that merits of electronic databases can be neglected to its demerits.

Second, the reading pushes forth the idea that new technique lessens the chances of error owing to electronic system might interdict the errors the doctors make on paper. Nonetheless, the professor contends that, cannot diminish the mistakes. According to the professor, doctors take notes, write prescription and so on, afterward the information are entered to the system by assistant. If there are mistakes on paper, errors will already be in the system as well. Consequently, we can argue that indeed the claim made in the reading is unsubstantiated.

Finally, the article posits that a vast number of patient's data may be utilized so as for aiding in research. The professor refutes this point by explaining that possibility is unlikely difficult and practical because there is so strict law that protects the patient record being used or collect without permission. We also learn that even a doctor intends to use, permission from the patient is necessitated as well as authority.

In summary, while both the reading and the lecture provide interesting information with regard to both upside and downside of way of storage of electronic and traditional medical records, a significant amount of evidence support that the professor presented more legitimate and tangible grounds. Hence, the reading passage fails to justify the claim towards stand point of the professor.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...realistic. She states that even doctors who are adopt the computer, still use paper rep...
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Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'adopted'.
Suggestion: adopted
...c. She states that even doctors who are adopt the computer, still use paper report in...
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Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vidence exhibited by the professor. As a result, we can safely assume that merits...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, second, so, still, well, while, as for, in summary, as well as, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 353.0 270.72406181 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3597733711 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86825761546 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 145.348785872 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57507082153 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 419.366225166 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3058185367 49.2860985944 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.294117647 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58823529412 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162682024036 0.272083759551 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377296585636 0.0996497079465 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581312855856 0.0662205650399 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843997229656 0.162205337803 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446260289012 0.0443174109184 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 63.6247240618 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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