glass
The listening lecture totally opposes to the reading passage about the solutions to prevent glass on the buildings to cause injuries to birds. To begin with, the reading says that people should replace the regular glass with the one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. However, the listening argues that this solution will not be helpful. For birds, they will still see the reflection in the one-way glass just like a mirror. Since they do not understand the propose of the mirror, they will still run into it. For example, they might see a reflection of trees and sky, but they do not know it is a reflection, so they will still bump into the glass. As a result, this solution is not likely to solve the problem.
In addition, the reading implies that people can paint colourful lines or other designs on the regular glass. On the other hand, the listening asserts that when people draw colours on the window, spaces will still occur in these lines and designs. As a result, when birds see these empty spaces, they will still try to fly though the hole. Some people may say that we can make the holes smaller, but in this way, the room will be too dark for people in the building. Therefore, it will not be helpful for people to paint colourful lines or designs on the glass.
Last but not least, the reading indicates that people should create a magnetic field to guild birds away from the building. However, the listening supports that birds do not use magnetic field during the short distances flight. They only use it during the long distances travel such as migrating to another city. When they travel in short distances, they only use their eyes and the light. Therefore, since birds do not use magnetic field when they travel around the buildings, this solution is not going to solve the problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... a mirror. Since they do not understand the propose of the mirror, they will still run into...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, in short, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 322.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67701863354 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22983961645 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450310559006 0.540411800872 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7789877862 49.2860985944 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.5882352941 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189633256111 0.272083759551 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751844402423 0.0996497079465 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106001838856 0.0662205650399 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128413305024 0.162205337803 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107557871595 0.0443174109184 243% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 53.8541721854 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.0289183223 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.42419426049 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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