Agree or disagree? It is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask others for advice.
In people's life, we often need to face many difficult problems, so we need to find out solutions to solve these problems. Some people said that it is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask others for advice. In my opinion, I totally disagree to this statement.
To begin with, listen to others' experience can help us finish our works more effectively. To be more specific, people often like to ask their friends about some assignments they had done. By asking them, they can receive the process of the assignment and finish the work more efficiently and effectively. For example, when I was in high school, I had a few friends who took the science class before me. Therefore, I always like to ask them about what they learned in the class. After I know about the information, I will start studying beforehand and if I have any problems, I can rather search on internet or ask my friends. As a result, it can be a lot more easier for me when I am actually attending the science class and eventually, I can have a better grade in this class. As a result, by listening to others' experience can help us understand more about a specific thing. Also, it can give us the opportunity to start preparing beforehand and lead to a better result. On the other hand, if I did not listen to others' experience, I may not have a high score in the science class because the class is not only hard, but it also require lots of projects. Therefore, since I did not study beforehand, I would not have enough knowledge to improve the quality of the project and receive a fantastic grade in this class.Thus, when we are facing difficulties, I think it is better to listen to others' experience than using our own.
In addition, we can learn from others if we listen to their knowledge. Every people has a field that he or she is extremely good at. If we listen to them, we can learn from their advantage and improve ourself. For example, my dad is a manager is his company, so he often need to hold many meeting and create presentations. However, he is not very good at designing slides and giving presentations. Therefore, I ask on of his employee who is extremely good at doing this. His employee told him some helpful ways to create some special effects on the presentation and make it more appealing to the audience. His employee even practice and pretend the presentation with my dad. Therefore, I dad improve a lot and he is not nervous of giving presentations anymore. As a result, I think learning from others' knowledge is the best way to improve our ability, so people should really listen to others' knowledge when we are facing problems.
Undoubtedly, some people say that it is better to solve a problem by yourself, because others' advice may not be always useful. However, I think that even if others' idea is not working, we can still learn from it and prevent us to make the same mistake as others did. Thus, it is way better to listen to others' knowledge and experience when we are facing any difficulties.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...y friends. As a result, it can be a lot more easier for me when I am actually attending the...
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Line 3, column 1132, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'requires'?
Suggestion: requires
...the class is not only hard, but it also require lots of projects. Therefore, since I di...
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Line 3, column 1319, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...receive a fantastic grade in this class.Thus, when we are facing difficulties, I thi...
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Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...others if we listen to their knowledge. Every people has a field that he or she is ex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2497.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54826958106 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69617114706 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420765027322 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5949543571 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4814814815 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2962962963 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267973295788 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789406347875 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137005651149 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211638851181 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128016615076 0.0645574589148 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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