Many companies sell products or services but at the same time cause environment damage. Someone said that it could be stopped by asking them to pay the penalty, such as higher tax, when they cause the environment damage. Others said there are better ways to stop them from harming the environment. What your opinion on this issue?
Environment issue is a huge problem in modern life. Many companies sell lots of products or services that is harmful to the environment. As a result, we need to find some ways to solve this problem. Some people think that the problem will be save if the company pay the penalty such as higher tax, while others think that there are better way to stop them from harming the environment. In my opinion, the latter will be a better choice.
To begin with, people should teach students about the environment fundamentally. When students have a deep understanding about the environment, they will know the drawbacks of doing this, such as it might cause some extinctions of animals or the water level rise and lead to the result of flood in some country. When they understand all of these drawbacks, they will consider more about the environment when they grow up in the future. For example, when I was in elementary school, we have a class about environment which teacher teach us about the negativities that will happen when we harm the environment. Also, they will teach us about how to stop harming and protect the environment. As a result, when my friends and I saw any litters while we were walking on the streets, we will pick it up and bring it home to throw it away. Although it is a small matter, it still can be beneficial to the environment. Moreover, when we grow up, we will not sell any harmful products or services because we know that it can cause disadvantages to the environment. Some might even teach others about this information and this can be really beneficial for the environment. In other words, teaching students about the environment is a great way to prevent people from doing some harmful things in the future.
In addition, when these companies pay the penalty, it will not be beneficial to the environment. To be more specific, there is no connection between paying money and protecting the environment. Even though the government might use these money to protect the environment, it is not going to work out very well. I think the best way to solve the problem is to stop harming the environment instead of finding way to protect the environment. Besides, the reason why these companies sell harmful products or services to the public is because they can earn a huge about of money. If they can earn lots of money, why will they care about paying the penalty? As a result, asking these company to pay penalty in not going to work, so we should use other solutions to stop them from harming the environment.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that the problem will be solved if the company pay the penalty, because the government can use these money to build some facilities to protect the environment. However, the environment will still be harmed even though they pay the penalty. The solution should not be asking them to pay more money, it should be how to stop them from harming the environment. As a result, it will be more beneficial for the environment if people can actually stop hurting the environment. Indeed, people should learn how to prevent these companies to harm the environment instead of asking them to pay the penalty.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
Suggestion: this money; these moneys; these monies
...t. Even though the government might use these money to protect the environment, it is not g...
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Line 3, column 671, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this company' or 'these companies'?
Suggestion: this company; these companies
...paying the penalty? As a result, asking these company to pay penalty in not going to work, so...
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Line 4, column 129, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
Suggestion: this money; these moneys; these monies
...penalty, because the government can use these money to build some facilities to protect the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 30.0 9.8082437276 306% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 8.0752688172 384% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2615.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 554.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7202166065 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70185495558 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.348375451264 0.524837075471 66% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 15.0 3.51792114695 426% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4014026943 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8518518519 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5185185185 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253977708794 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928129532625 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053498653333 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194113192999 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351115674275 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.57 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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