Humans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia.

Essay topics:

Humans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia.

In this set of the materials, the author of the reading passage expresses three theories of elephant behaviors. However, the professor thinks that the author's hypotheses contain some defects.

First of all, the author states that elephants know that they are nearing the end of their lives due to the discovery of many sites containing bones exclusively of elderly elephants. On the contrary, the professor indicates that because old elephants' teeth are worn down, it is hard for them to chew. Therefore, old elephants need to find the soft vegetation to chew, and soft vegetation happens to grow near to the river. Eventually, old elephants die near the river.

In addition, the author claims that elephants may have artistic ability. Because elephants can be taught to hold a paintbrush in their trunk and use it to paint on a canvas. However, the professor asserts that when trainers train elephants to paint, they will stroke the elephants' ears if elephants did wrong. Because elephant's ears are sensitive, it will encourage elephants to learn how to paint. Hence, it hard to assume that whether or not elephants have the artistic ability due to their training methods.

Finally, the author raises the point that elephants are afraid of mice due to the recent scientific experiment in which a herd of elephants was confronted with several mice, the elephants backed away from the mice and left the area to avoid them. On the other hand, the professor refutes author's idea by saying that the reason elephants backed away when they saw the mice is because elephants are unfamiliar to the mice instead of scared of mice themselves. Like elephants in the zoo, they are already familiar with mice, and they won't back away when they see the mice. When the elephants know that mice are not threatened for them, they won't afraid of mice.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...to paint. Hence, it hard to assume that whether or not elephants have the artistic ability due...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, in addition, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 310.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94516129032 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5056626815 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.9 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8580969784 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105086775583 0.272083759551 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462110300546 0.0996497079465 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.023629679512 0.0662205650399 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0652868186183 0.162205337803 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319448549109 0.0443174109184 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.