Humans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia. Their large ears, long trunk, and long life span have made elephants one of the most captivating creatures on Earth. Our long-standing interest in elephants has led to several beliefs about surprising elephant behaviors.
Elephants Are Aware of Approaching Death One of the popular beliefs is that when elephants become old and weak, they know that they are nearing the end of their lives. They demonstrate this by breaking away from their herds and going off alone to certain locations often found near bodies of water - so called "elephant graveyards" - to die alone. The idea that old elephants seem aware that they will die soon is supported by the discovery of many sites containing bones exclusively of elderly elephants.
Representing Objects through Art Additionally, elephants seem to have artistic ability. Elephants can be taught to hold a paintbrush in their trunk and use it to paint on a canvas. Some elephants have been known to paint drawings that represent recognizable things: flowers, other elephants, even themselves. This talent makes elephants the only animal other than humans to produce art representing the world around them.
Fear of Mice Finally, it has long been believed that elephants have a fear of mice. In 77 C.E., the Roman philosopher and scientist Pliny the Elder wrote that elephants are more afraid of mice, small mammals that can do elephants no harm, than of the much more dangerous animals with which elephants normally share an environment, such as lions or tigers. In a recent scientific experiment in which a herd of elephants was confronted with several mice, the elephants backed away from the mice and left the area to avoid them.
In the passage, the author mainly talks about some surprising behaviors of elephants. However, in the lecture, the professor state that the author is misunderstanding elephant behaviors.
Firstly, the author said that when they notice they are nearing the end of their lives, they would go to “elephant graveyards” alone. However, the professor said that, when elephants become old, their teeth would down and it is difficult for them to eating. Actually, “the elephant graveyards” is the area where near water and has some soft vegetation for them to eat. SO almost every elephant dies there.
Secondly, the author said that elephants are the only animal which could draw except human. However, the professor claimed that trainers would touch elephants’ ears when they are drawing. The trainers encourage to draw some specific line by touching elephants in certain ways. In fact, elephants just draw lines without knowing what do they draw.
Thirdly, people think elephants are afraid of mice instead of some dangerous animals like tigers or lions. However, the professor explained that elephants are not afraid of mice, instead, it is cautious because they do not familiar with mice. Elephants which live in zoos do not fear mice because elephants are familiar with mice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'drawing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: drawing
...hey are drawing. The trainers encourage to draw some specific line by touching elephant...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1088.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 205.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30731707317 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58543027992 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570731707317 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.2550079754 49.2860985944 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.6923076923 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7692307692 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192717094533 0.272083759551 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828462723628 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372263278741 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115226387938 0.162205337803 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380861086866 0.0443174109184 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 63.6247240618 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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