Integrated essay. TPO 15

In this set of material, both the reading and the professor are talking about the measures proposed to stop the spread of the cane toad in Australia. The cane toad is a large amphibians species native to Central and North America. The reading provide three measures to stop the spread of the cane toad. Conversely the professor casts doubts on what has mentioned in the reading.

First, the reading claims that, build a national fence would prevent the spread of the toad . But the professor says that, this measure is unsuccessful because it will cause unwanted damages. Many toad's eggs found in rivers and streams, and they are flowing from one side of the river to the other side. So the fence will act as abridge which carries the eggs from one side to the other side, and as a result toad's population will increase.

Second , the reading claims that, the volunteers can capture and destroy the toads. However the professor says that, it likely untrained volunteers , and they will damage many Australian frogs instead of toads' eggs. Because they cannot easily differentiate between them.

Third, the reading argues that, a disease causing virus can control the cane toad population. But the professor says that, using virus will do a trouble in the toads' original habitat in Central and South America by spreading of the virus through toads' populations. In addition they are part of ecosystem , and the whole ecosystem will suffer.

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Sentence: The reading provide three measures to stop the spread of the cane toad.
Description: The fragment reading provide three is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace provide with verb, past tense

build a national fence would prevent the spread of the toad .
building a national fence would prevent the spread of the toad .

Many toad's eggs found in rivers and streams
Many toad's eggs are found in rivers and streams

However the professor says that, it likely untrained volunteers
However the professor says that, it is likely untrained volunteers

Sentence: In addition they are part of ecosystem , and the whole ecosystem will suffer.
Description: The fragment part of ecosystem is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 242 250
No. of Characters: 1162 1200
No. of Different Words: 122 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.944 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.802 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.338 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.261 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4