Integrated task Private fossil collectors

The passage and the lecture talks about how private collectors are buying fossils and how this has turned into a booming business. The debate that follows throws light on the impact of this trade on general public and scientists.

Firstly, the passage suggests that the fossils that would normally end up in museums are now being bought by private collectors. These collectors usually don't let the general public view these fossils which can ultimately lead to a "decline in public interest" towards these artifacts. The lecturer however contradicts this opinion and points out how the private collectors end up selling these fossils to institutions like schools, where they are put up for display. This provides an even wider access to the common public for viewing and appreciating these fossils.

Secondly, the lecturer dismisses the opinion depicted in the passage that scientists loose the opportunity to make important discoveries related to extinct life forms when private collectors buy the fossils. She explains how, to determine the actual value of any fossil, it needs to be evaluated by an expert. These experts are none other than the scientists. Therefore, irrespective of the location where the fossil would end up - a museum or a private collection- it has to pass through the hands of a scientist.

Finally, the lecturer goes on to mention the fact that Universities or similar research organizations rarely carry out any excavation operations. Consequently, if it wasn't for the commercial collectors, who invest time and money on such operations, most of the fossils would've remained undiscovered. As a result, the lecturer feels its better to have more number of fossils being discovered, even though the commercial collectors may miss out on crucial evidence while retrieving these artifacts, as mentioned in the passage.

Votes
Average: 8.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ws light on the impact of this trade on general public and scientists. Firstly, the passage...
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...te collectors. These collectors usually dont let the general public view these fossi...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
.... These collectors usually dont let the general public view these fossils which can ultimately...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...se fossils which can ultimately lead to a 'decline in public interest' ...
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Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...avation operations. Consequently, if it wasnt for the commercial collectors, who inve...
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Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: would've
...on such operations, most of the fossils wouldve remained undiscovered. As a result, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, therefore, while, as to, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34812286689 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92446004672 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587030716724 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3534146882 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.538461538 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06452816374 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234342269995 0.272083759551 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828458207639 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662457395035 0.0662205650399 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149644190612 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338703820821 0.0443174109184 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.