integrated task... traditional way of voting vs. computers

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integrated task... traditional way of voting vs. computers

In the set of material, the reading and the lecture talk about replacing a traditional voting system with a computerized voting system. The article claims that the tradition way of voting has several issues, so it should be replaces with more trust worthy computerized system; it provides three reasons for support the claim. On the other hand, the professor says it’s doubtful that computerized voting will make the situation better and he refuses each reasons mentioned in the passage.

Firstly, the author asserts that people accidentally vote for the wrong candidate is the major source of inaccuracy in the traditional voting and computers can use easily. While the professor claims that people who don’t use a computer daily, they will have trouble using computerized voting machines. It may end up in the wrong vote or be discouraged from voting because of fear of technology.

Another point mentioned in the article is that the traditional way of voting is rely heavily on people to count the votes and they are more likely to make mistakes. In contrast, the lecture says its true some time human make mistakes in counting, but computers are also human innovation and error caused by computers will be more serious. Result of that, computers may miscount many votes or may permanently remove those from the program.

Finally, the passage points that government and every person trust computers for bank transactions and communication, so using it for voting would not be risky. On the other hand the professor posits that the computer used daily for banking and communication purposes and they were not perfect when introduced first, they improves over a time. However, the voting happens one a two years so it is not sufficient to develop confidence to use it.

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so it should be replaces with more trust worthy computerized system
so it should be replaced with more trust by worthy computerized system

people accidentally vote for the wrong candidate is the major source of inaccuracy in the traditional voting
people accidentally vote for the wrong candidate, which is the major source of inaccuracy in the traditional voting

the traditional way of voting is rely heavily on people
the traditional way of voting is relying heavily on people

the lecture says its true
the lecture says it's true

Sentence: On the other hand, the professor says it's doubtful that computerized voting will make the situation better and he refuses each reasons mentioned in the passage.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to each and reasons

Sentence: ... human make mistakes in counting, but computers are also human innovation and error caused by computers will be more serious.
Description: The fragment human make mistakes is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense

Sentence: On the other hand the professor posits that the computer used daily for banking and communication purposes and they were not perfect when introduced first, they improves over a time.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to they and improves

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No. of Different Words: 156 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.925 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 4.958 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
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Number of Paragraphs: 4 4