Integrated writing TPO 51

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Integrated writing - TPO 51

The reading passage explores three behaviors ascribed to the fascinating elephants. However, the lecturer contradicts with all the assertion by giving three points as supports.

First of all, the passage claims that because old elephants are aware of their approaching death, they separate themselves from the herd and stay lonely beside the water as their graveyard until to die. On the other hand, the professor brings practical reason for this elephants behavior. Accordingly, she states that because it is difficult for old elephants to eat whatever the younger ones eat, therefor they look for softer vegetables for eating and because softer vegetables are found in the water they tend to go near water.

Additionally, the reading mentions that elephants have artistic talent to draw with their trunk. While, the professor explains that elephant are trained to paint and because they have sensitive ears the coach encourage them to repeat the pattern of painting by touching their ears. So, it do not mean they know what they paint.

Finally, the author of the passage points out the elephants' fear of mice due to reaction they show when they confront with some mice, although they never show this kind of response to the more dangerous animals like lions. However, the professor consider this idea misinterpretation and says that elephants react fearfully when they are unfamiliar with object. Therefor, it is kind of their cautiousness and if they acquaint with mice just like lion they do not mind them.

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Average: 4.7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'elephants'' or 'elephant's'?
Suggestion: elephants'; elephant's
...fessor brings practical reason for this elephants behavior. Accordingly, she states that ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...painting by touching their ears. So, it do not mean they know what they paint. ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, first, however, if, look, so, while, kind of, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 246.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18292682927 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58872882979 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589430894309 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4744575906 49.2860985944 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.909090909 110.228320801 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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