Integrated writing - TPO 51

Both the reading and the lecture are about why elephants are fascinating animals. The reading claims three beliefs about elephants while the reading casts doubts all the claims in the reading and provides three explanation of support.

First, the reading mentions that elephants have the ability to know when they are going to die, and that is why they leave their herds and go other places alone when they become old. This point is challenged in the lecture by saying that elephants are not aware of the time that they die. It says that there are practical reasons why they go near water when they get older, such as their teeth lose their ability to chew and it become difficult for them to eat hard things. Food near water is mostly soft and that is the reason why they go there. That clearly explains the elephant graveyards.

Second, the reading assumes that elephants are the only animals have artistic abilities because they can use paintbrush. However, the lecture posits that by explaining the training elephants by touching their ears. These elephants trained by people by touching their ears because elephant's ears are so sensitive, so everytime the person touches the ears, the elephant repeats the pattern. However, elephants do not know the drawing represents any thing.such as flowers and animals.

Third, the reading states that elephants are afraid of mice, and it provides an example of experiment which the herd of elephants was faced with several mice, the elephants tried to escape from them. The reading, however, says that scientists misinterpret that experiment because elephants are not reacting to mice themselves, actually they are reacting something that they do not know. A mice is not a familiar animal to elephants. When they get use to see them at a zoo, they do not mind at all.

Votes
Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...teeth lose their ability to chew and it become difficult for them to eat hard things. ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...ants do not know the drawing represents any thing.such as flowers and animals. Third, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 388, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A mouse' or simply 'mice'?
Suggestion: A mouse; Mice
...acting something that they do not know. A mice is not a familiar animal to elephants. ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 395, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...something that they do not know. A mice is not a familiar animal to elephants. Whe...
^^
Line 7, column 448, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...liar animal to elephants. When they get use to see them at a zoo, they do not mind ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, second, so, third, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 306.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95098039216 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43115511362 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493464052288 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0204991803 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 7.06452816374 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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