Integrated Writing TPO46
In this set of materials, both the reading passage and the lecture discuss about the potential advantages of switching paper-based medical records to electronic ones. In fact, what is said in the lecture contradicts what is stated in the reading. The lecturer believes the advantages listed in the reading are uncertain and provides three firm evidences to support her opinion.
The first advantage stated in the reading is reducing cost specifically on storage. However, the lecturer proposes that the doctors who adopt the electronic databases still keep the paper records for legal reason and emergency use. Therefore, doctors still need to pay for the storing expense and no significant amount of money is saved.
Also, the reading points out the second advantage is preventing errors such as illegible handwriting and improper transcription. In contrast, the lecturer argues that electronic records cannot eliminate poor handwriting nor problematic transcription because doctors write prescription by hand and will need other workers to transcript and type into the computer afterwards.
Finally, the last advantage stated in the reading is aiding medical research. Nonetheless, the lecturer claims that the medical research will still be difficult since the major problem is the subject privacy issues. Since the research team still needs to go through the strict and complicated process to get the permission from patients, there is no significant aid for doing research.
In conclusion, based on the evidences provided, the lecturer refutes the
all three advantages stated in the reading.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 22.412803532 22% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57551020408 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86516657605 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2103110166 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.833333333 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06452816374 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280094841175 0.272083759551 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967125830344 0.0996497079465 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084129484448 0.0662205650399 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116555776419 0.162205337803 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852975567373 0.0443174109184 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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