Integrated Writing TPO32
In this set of materials, both the reading passage and the lecture are discussing about the strange sounds detected by Russian submarines. However, the lecturer casts doubt on the theories in the reading and provides evidences respectively to support her opinion.
First, the reading suggests the strange sounds were made by Ocra whales since there were a large population inhabit around the area where the submarines stayed. However, the lecturer purposes that though the theory is plausible, it is, in fact, highly unlikely. Because most Ocra whales live close to the surface and that the sonar should be able to detect whales, the sound should not be made by the whales.
The second theory claims that the noises were produced by giant squid given that it is reasonable to not detected by sonar due to the soft structure of squids. In contrast, it is argued in the lecture that if the noises were made by squids, it should suddenly appear in 1960s and suddenly vanished in 1980s since squids always live there.
Finally, the third theory indicates that it may be another country's submarines that made the quackers. Nonetheless, the lecturer points out that even nowadays technology, submarines are not capable of moving fast enough and having such a silent engine noise hence it is not possible the source of the quackers is from another submarine.
In conclusion, based on the evidences provided, the lecturer refutes the
points made in the reading.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1960s'.
Suggestion: in the 1960s
...de by squids, it should suddenly appear in 1960s and suddenly vanished in 1980s since sq...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
...y appear in 1960s and suddenly vanished in 1980s since squids always live there. Fina...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, third, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1226.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 242.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06611570248 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49460862552 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4295574411 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.6 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8 7.06452816374 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305159703164 0.272083759551 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112455812365 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841871362858 0.0662205650399 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117539253926 0.162205337803 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965027539218 0.0443174109184 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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