Agree or Disagree? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Nowadays, due to the growth and popularization of social media, celebrities' opinions shared on social media can approach to numerous audience. It is highly debated whether the opinions of celebrities are more important to young people than to older people. While some people do not agree on it, the others hold the opposite opinion. For me, I firmly believe that young people are easier to be influenced by the opinions of celebrities.
To begin with, young people are relatively naive and thus have more tendency to believe the opinions made by celebrities. Though young people may know about the concept of critical thinking, they are lack of life experiences and knowledges to really use critical thinking. For example, when I was a teenager, I once watched a video made by celebrities that promoted a kind of medicine with the power to make adult grow taller. I did not have enough knowledge on the height growing process so I completely believe it without questioning the composition of the medicine. However, when I told my mom about the medicine, she sensed the unreasonable effect and took a closer look on the medicine. And she was right, the medicine ended up as a fake advertisement. Therefore, naivety make celebrities’ opinions more important to young people since young people will take their words without examination.
In addition, young people usually pick celebrities as their role models and will follow their opinions. This is quite common to be seen to use in advertisements. For example, when targeting at young people, the company usually finds the most popular idols among young generation to serve as product endorser. Since young people regard the idol as their role model, they want to replicate what the role model does. Therefore, when they see the idol drinking the new beverage, they will immediately get one just to make themselves feel like they are similar to their idol. The behavior of regarding celebrities as role models makes the opinion of celebrities important to young people.
To sum up, celebrities’ opinions have more influence on young people that on older people because young people are so naive that they will take celebrities’ words without questioning them. Furthermore, young people tend to set celebrities as their role models and hence make celebrities’ opinion more important. Accordingly, the opinions of celebrities are surely more important to young people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, really, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, kind of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21065989848 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98852129015 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494923857868 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8485967213 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.65 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235742018346 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905500282698 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875333172987 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176716535186 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679937045711 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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