Agree or Disagree? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
It is highly debated whether young people today have no influence on the the important decisions determining the future of society as a whole. While some people tend to agree with the statement and give the facts that most influential government officer and the rich are elder people, the others hold the opposite opinion. Since the young people will become the mainstay as time goes by and that young people can indirectly make impact on current important decisions, I firmly believe that young people do have influence on determining the future of the society.
To begin with, young people serve as citizens in a country and thus are able to influence the governmental composition by voting. Although young people might not have the opportunity to be directly influence a huge decision made by the government, they can vote for the candidates that best represent their political tendency and let the candidates fulfill what they are requesting for.
In addition, as time goes by, young people will grow older and will take important roles in companies or governments hence will have the real direct impact on decision making. If young people graduate at the age of 22 and start working no matter in governmental organization or private corporation, they will potentially be raised to managerial levels or significant roles after working for 10 years. At that time, they will the power to change things and make influence. For example, if they serve as legislator, they can determine the laws to pass or not. That is, young people will become the mainstay in future and thus can make difference to the society in the future.
To sum up, although it might be true that young people can not make direct influence right now, young people can use voting to indirectly impel their supportive candidates to make difference. And in the future when young people grow old and establish a strong position in the society, they can directly impact the society as a whole. Accordingly, young people indeed have influence on the important decisions to to determine the future society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, hence, if, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99711815562 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65852604192 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466858789625 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1260205031 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.384615385 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6923076923 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451836982102 0.236089414692 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200822972105 0.076458572812 263% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.19057817268 0.0737576698707 258% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313886108729 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154140574803 0.0645574589148 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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