Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Throughout history, there was an opinion about the fact that young people can not manage a company, therefore, they should always learn aspects of job from the elder person, having various experiences in that field. As you may see by now, we had great founders who were young when started their own company. There is a controversial debate these days among groups whether young individuals have the ability to affect the future of society or not. Personally, I believe not only do they have this ability but also they are latter pioneers in every country. I will vindicate my point of view with 2 reasons, two of which are about technology and politics.
Let us start with technology, we live in an era that all parts of our lives depend on technology, from our communication to our education and so on. Since the advent of this phenomenon, we have seen many companies establishing in this particular field. Who was their chief? Almost all of them were youths who had ambitious to change the global’s future lifestyle. Up to now, there have been a lot of surveys all around the world about this issue. Let me drive your attention to a study that was published in Time Magazine last year. In that investigation, researchers study on almost 1000 new firms that start their activity. The result showed those which had young leaders could reach great points and be a successful company. All of these reasons state that it is the time to trust young individuals since they have up to date knowledge and can change the future.
Secondly, when we think about the influent person what is most important than politicians? Our future life depends a lot on the attitudes of politicians who manage our country. In the past, most of the time they were old men who had experienced different situations in their life, but did not have fresh mind as youths do. However, we have seen many great young people who made a decision for a country, not only they did not fail in their duty but also they boomed the country's prestige in various fields. Justin Troudo, the prime minister of Canada, in my opinion, is the embodiment of great politician who can improve his country in all aspects, from global connection with other nations to absorbing experts from different countries. This is the time to give the global car’s steering wheel to young persons and let them ride it toward prosperity, they have enough knowledge to be committed to this responsibility, furthermore, I believe they can do the best for our next generation.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments, gone are the time when we saw the elder person as a manufactory’s manager or as a president. Nowadays, we do not need older people to be successful communities, on the contrary, we need a person with innovative viewpoints to change the current situation and build a great circumstance for our kids and grand kids.
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to 73
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- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think it is a good idea? 70
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different tasks to do during the workday than they do similar tasks all day long. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
...efore, they should always learn aspects of job from the elder person, having vario...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82071713147 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76981269247 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51593625498 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6802958464 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77272727273 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146609602898 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430356140757 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326007402971 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962577811497 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430744441777 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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