Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think it is a good idea?
Nowadays, there are many methods for raising children and one of the considerable issues is kids’ education which has a great effect on young people's future life. So parents try to encourage little kids to study well, therefore they strive in different ways one of them is prising them by giving money for every success they accomplish in their lessons. Plethora of people hold the opinion that this method is not good, on the other hand, some people agree with this method and think it can help little students to progress in their courses. Personally, I believe in the latter viewpoint. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue is the fact that these days children have many different objects surrounding them which tempts them to spend their precious time on anything except studying and it is not good because they ought to focus on their education because it is what is beneficial for their future they will earn money with it and they will be successful person by it. So in my opinion parents should help them to concentrate on this matter and encourage them and as you know money is like honey for anybody, so it can be the best thing to make little kids to spend more time studying. I remember when I was a child my father gave me 10$ for each good mark in my lessons and because of the money I became serious in studying since I wanted to buy PlayStation for my self with those. I have a cousin who has the same age as me, my uncle always been aggressive with him and force him to study but he did not know how to make him eager to learn more, he usually use bad manner methods. Not only could not he made my cousin learn but also he affected his emotional sense and my cousin become a depressed person.
Second, I think one of the most important and joyful feelings is dependency. Mankind likes to be a independent person all the time and I think it is great for a human to feel it from an early time, like childhood. The most crucial matter for being an independent person is earning money. Therefore, in my opinion, it is a great method for parents to give their little boys or girls this feeling and at the same time encourage them to learn more. When I was at the high school I hated to ask my father for money, because it made me think that I am not mature enough and on the other hand I could not go and work because I had so many courses to consider about and they were more important for my life. This is a big hesitation in my opinion, but if I can earn money from studying it was great situation for me and my father made it by eliminating my monthly money and told me that instead of that he would give me good money if I pass my exams or he would give me more if I could become the first person in my class and this encouraged me to study day and night for that money and by doing so I was the best student all my highschool period. This is clear evidence that shows us this method is really useful because I have felt it in my own life.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that little kids need something to encourage them to study and what is better than the money that helps them to buy anything they want. In my opinion, it is the best method for making little children study hard and build a great future for themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, well, i think, you know, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 118.0 43.0788530466 274% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2846.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 655.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34503816794 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05894927669 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35317846043 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435114503817 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 895.5 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.316535039 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.789473684 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4736842105 20.6045352989 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199719096943 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636405458234 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476216689636 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124512312558 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272469045188 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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