Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Nowadays, it is common that parents are busy work and have limited time to spend with their children. It is highly debated whether the best use of busy parents’ time is to spend on having fun with their children or use to help with children’s schoolwork. While some may argue that educating is parents’ responsibilities and thus tend to advocate for spending time doing schoolwork, others hold different opinion. For me, I firmly believe that busy parents should spend time on having fun time with their children for the best use.
The core value of a family is love, caring, and happiness; hence, it is extremely important for parents to create unforgettable memories with their children. Parents should always serve as the best supporting of the kids, and provide emotional shelter when kids get hurt from the outside world. For example, my parents were both busy working when I was young but we always had our annual family trip and weekly family day. We went to numerous fun places, played a variety of games, and explored many foreign countries together. They expressed their love and caring during the trip. By having precious family time, I link happiness and warmth to my parents and I realize how much they care about me and how much affection they have to me. Therefore, I always go to them when I encounter difficulties or receive honors and that is how a family should function.
However, some may claim validity of the argument that educating children should the top responsibility that parents to complete. At first glance, the argument may seem to be plausible, but further reflection reveals that it leaves out significant factors that needs to be addressed to substantiate its stance. As a starter, it is clear that academic performance cannot be improved with a short period of time. Moreover, since busy parents do not have enough time, they most likely do not understand what their children’s weakness and thus will fail to solve their problems. Therefore, with limit of time, teaching children’s schoolwork will not result in better grades but worse relationships between parents and children.
To sum up, it is best for busy parents to spend their time doing fun things with children because creating sweet and loving moments help attain the core value of the family. Though people may argue that educating children is more important and thus disagree with my point of view over this matter, I think the reasons I have provided in favor of my point of view are stronger.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...nd on having fun with their children or use to help with children's schoolwork...
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...ormance cannot be improved with a short period of time. Moreover, since busy parents do not ha...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...avor of my point of view are stronger.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98581560284 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7253079766 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522458628842 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1691240145 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.166666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466944457522 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152234048295 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139464923319 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294992262985 0.150856017488 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149412379047 0.0645574589148 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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