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At a sale at a private home in California several years ago, a man purchased a box of photographic negatives stored in envelopes (negatives are photographic images on film or glass from which actual photographs can be made). The negatives dated from the 1920s and showed landscape scenes of the western United States. While the negatives carried no indication of the name of the photographer who created them, some people have concluded that the negatives were in fact made by the landscape photographer Ansel Adams, one of the greatest American photographers of the twentieth century. Several arguments have been offered in support of this idea.
First, the negatives include images of landscape features that Ansel Adams is known to have photographed. One of the negatives shows a large pine tree leaning downward on a cliff. The same distinctively shaped tree appears in another photograph that, without a doubt, was taken by Adams in the 1920s.
Second, the envelopes holding the negatives are numbered and marked with handwritten place names. The handwriting on the envelopes seems to resemble the handwriting of Virginia Adams, Ansel Adams’ wife. Virginia Adams is known to have assisted her husband in his work, so those who believe that Ansel Adams created these negatives have concluded that she helped her husband organize these negatives by numbering them and recording the names of the places where the images were created.
Third, a number of the negatives have been damaged by fire, it is well known that Ansel Adams’ photography studio had a fire that destroyed or damaged nearly a third of his negatives. The fact that some of the negatives bought at the sale have fire damage is consistent with the idea that they once belonged to Ansel Adams.
The reading provides some evidences to account for the idea that the photographs were taken by Ansel Adams. The lecturer, on the other hand, finds all the reasons dubious and refutes them by detailed explanations.
First, the author states that some of the photographs include some landscapes that are similar to those that Ansel were famous for. The professor, however, rejects this notion. He asserts that this is true that some of pictures resemble Ansel's works, but these photpgraphs, particularly the large pine tree image, relate to a park which was famous among people, and contained lots of interesting sites to take photo. Moreover, this park had thousands of visitors who may have taken photos.
Second, the passage mentions some handwritings on the images that are look like the handwriting of Ansel Adams' wife. The lecturer, in contrast, claims that there is a flaw in this idea. Indeed, these handwritings include some spelling errors, which is unlikely to be made by Ansel's wife. This is because his wife had been living in that area since her childhood, and should have known the spelling of that name.
Finally, the reading states that some of the pictures have been injured by fire. Furthermore, every body knows that Ansel's studio had encountered fire. The professor, in contrast, states that a large number of studios had affected by fire at that time. This is due to the fact that the photographers were using a variety of flamable staff, which enhanced the chance of burning their studios. So, this does not reveal that these photographs relate to Ansel Adams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ions. First, the author states that some of the photographs include some landscapes tha...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lude some landscapes that are similar to those that Ansel were famous for. The pr...
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Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the pictures') or simply say ''some pictures''.
Suggestion: some of the pictures; some pictures
...tion. He asserts that this is true that some of pictures resemble Ansels works, but these photpg...
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Line 7, column 34, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...me. Finally, the reading states that some of the pictures have been injured by fire. Fur...
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Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...The professor, in contrast, states that a large number of studios had affected by fire at that ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 264.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02651515152 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52930199306 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556818181818 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3556334891 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4666666667 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0873622281306 0.272083759551 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310396310614 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346562302982 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0558333757784 0.162205337803 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222831370164 0.0443174109184 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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