Nowadays, living in a society full of fierce competition, many people express concerns about what is supposed to be the crucial element that improves our overall quality. Some people advocate that we should foster skills and abilities related to our full-time job, while others hold the reverse viewpoint that unrelated skills are more beneficial to our life and career. As far as I am concerned, I render my support to the latter idea, and what I believe can be substantiated as follows.
First, developing skills and abilities unrelated to our job delivers benefits to our life satisfaction. What is known to us all is that in the process of civilization, people are enduring more and more pressure caused by life and work. Many people are enslaved by the exhaustion resulting from untiring work and some of them are even at the edge of mental collapse. At this moment, hobbies having nothing to do with job affairs prompt individuals to establish a balance between life and work. To illustrate, workers are capable of drawing paintings, playing musical instruments, and doing some workouts after work time, unwinding and refreshing themselves. One of my friends, Lucy, entered one of consulting companies listed in the Fortune 500 after graduation. She suffers from the pressure of working and earning money. After her regular work time, she chooses to swim to relax herself. Immersing in the water, she readily retrieves the peace of life.
In addition, just because the skills and abilities are not relevant to the full-time job does not mean that they are not treasured by society and companies. Needless to say, our society cherishes and values creativity, expression, and cooperation. Although some skills may not directly facilitate the work at hand, they may function well when people are facing new opportunities and risks emerging from modernization. For example, I work as a clerk in a company, dealing with some paperwork. However, I would like to invest my spare time in learning programming just because it is intriguing to me. I spared no effects to improve my ability, and one day when I found a fantastic chance that our company decided to develop our own computer system, my skills stood out. I grasped that opportunity and contributed to the project, leading to my career promotion eventually.
Admittedly, learning some skills directly related to our full-time job is conducive to our career development on the spot, and we can grasp a more comprehensive understanding of our current job and think more systematically. But it is undeniable that in the long term, these extra hard workings may shatter work-life balance, enlarging our work time and leading to burnout. These deficiencies cannot be compensated by appropriate means. Meanwhile, the merits of studying diversified and manifold skills, which release our stress and prepare us to face potential risks and challenges, ought to be emphasized.
In a nutshell, since our society keeps developing, being equipped with various skills will still matter in the future. Learning knowledge and skills unrelated to our full-time job not only ensures our overall quality but also paves the path for future success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 551, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...ike to invest my spare time in learning programming just because it is intriguing to me. I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, well, while, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 7.30242825607 370% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 22.412803532 254% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 30.3222958057 228% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2682.0 1373.03311258 195% => OK
No of words: 518.0 270.72406181 191% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17760617761 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.04702891845 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87897067467 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 145.348785872 195% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546332046332 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 419.366225166 200% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 3.25607064018 399% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 13.0662251656 191% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7012768692 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.28 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.72 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36 7.06452816374 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 4.33554083885 369% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233600742225 0.272083759551 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624404895818 0.0996497079465 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720245643136 0.0662205650399 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147951072714 0.162205337803 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255920656545 0.0443174109184 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 63.6247240618 253% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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