The reading and the writing are both about buzzing, which is a new strategy that companies fellow to attract more consumers. While the author believes many publics wants to ban it. The professor refutes that statement made by the author. He states two reasons for that, I will explore in this essay.
First of all, the writer suggests that buzzers mislead the consumers by giving wrong information about products because, they are paid people. However, the writer contends that buzzers mislead consumers to buy the wrong products since they are hired by the businesses. This argument is challenged by the lecturer, he believes that it is not true that buzzers are not telling the truth since, companies choose people who are interested in their products or services. In contrast to the commercials which advertisers are paid people.
Secondly, the writer contends that buzzers might be hired and might give mislead information about products that may harm consumers. The article notes that people would be more suspicious and can not trust others because of buzzing. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by asserting that customers ask the buzzers a lot of questions. Moreover, if they are not interested in the answers, most likely they do not buy the product.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...anies fellow to attract more consumers. While the author believes many publics wants ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that, I will explore in this essay. First of all, the writer sugges...
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Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...lling the truth since, companies choose people who are interested in their products or...
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Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...services. In contrast to the commercials which advertisers are paid people. ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which advertisers are paid people. Secondly, the writer contends t...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... likely they do not buy the product.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1073.0 1373.03311258 78% => OK
No of words: 207.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18357487923 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54121892946 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 145.348785872 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 419.366225166 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5307667773 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4166666667 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06452816374 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19903733767 0.272083759551 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651534876839 0.0996497079465 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048025891761 0.0662205650399 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122398004861 0.162205337803 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743911038963 0.0443174109184 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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