Many countries require cigarette smokers to pay particularly high taxes on their purchases of cigarettes similar taxes are being considered for unhealthy foods The policy of imposing high taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy products has a number of so

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Many countries require cigarette smokers to pay particularly high taxes on their purchases of cigarettes; similar taxes are being considered for unhealthy foods. The policy of imposing high taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy products has a number of social benefits.
First of all, the taxes discourage people from indulging in unhealthy behaviors. Raising taxes on cigarettes, for instance, leads people to buy fewer of them. Smoking has declined as taxes on tobacco have risen, showing that these taxes do work to make society healthier. It can be expected that imposing similar taxes on unhealthy food and beverages would help reduce obesity rates.
Second, taxes of this kind are financially fair. When people get sick as a result of their smoking or eating unhealthy foods, they create medical costs. It is unfair that everyone in the society—including nonsmokers and people who follow a healthy diet—should contribute equally to covering these costs. Taxing people who engage in unhealthy behaviors creates extra income that can be used to cover the medical costs. In this way, some of the financial burden is shifted from all of society to just those who choose to participate in the unhealthy activities.
Finally, the high rate of taxation on cigarettes significantly increases revenue for the government. In addition to using this tax revenue on medical assistance, governments often use the revenue for other projects that benefit public welfare, such as building stadiums or creating public parks. Even basic government-supported services like public education benefit from these taxes. Thus, the taxes on cigarettes—and the proposed taxes on unhealthy foods—benefit everyone.

Both the passage writer and the lecturer discuss whether the policy of paying high taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy food brings benefits to society. The writer provides three main evidence seems to up hold his claim that the policy will bring lots of benefit to society. However, the lecturer disagrees with theses statements.

First of all, the writer claims that the taxes can discourage people to do those bad behaviors, becuase the higher prices of the product, the chance that people likely to buy the product will decrease. Still, it is quite different with the lecturer's proclaim. She states that the taxes will not be neccessary to help reducing the bad behaviors. For example, the high taxes of cigarettes urge people to buy the lower quality and cheaper cigarettes which have more harmful ingredients. In this case, people will increase the risk of serious diseases. Similarly, poeople will continue spending money on the unhealthy food, the money of the healthy food will decrease.

In addition, the lecturer also disagrees with writer's statement that it is financially fair for people who smoke or eat unhealthy food to pay more money on it. She states that, in fact, it is unfair. We should take people's income in to consider. Paying high taxes for the lower income people might not be fair when compare with the money paid from the people with higher income. The people have lower income might have heavier burden to pay for this.

Third, the writer also says that having high rate of taxation can increase the revenue for the government. The government can use these extra money in other projects which can benefit everyone. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this claim. She believes that with this large amount of money, the government will be too depend on this. For example, the government will allow people smoking at pulic areas or private places, because they do not want to lose this significant revenue. In this case, the taxes will not make the public to be more healthy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to reduce' or 'reduce'.
Suggestion: to reduce; reduce
...he taxes will not be neccessary to help reducing the bad behaviors. For example, the hig...
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Line 7, column 316, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to depend'?
Suggestion: to depend
...amount of money, the government will be too depend on this. For example, the government wi...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, similarly, so, still, third, for example, in addition, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 338.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96153846154 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35769117535 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497041420118 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 419.366225166 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2566096758 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.85 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06452816374 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231796379304 0.272083759551 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711740756291 0.0996497079465 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922715306921 0.0662205650399 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155348192468 0.162205337803 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553728854142 0.0443174109184 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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