Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Lots of celebrities will share their perspective with young people. Some people think their opinion is not valuable for young people. However, in my opinion, I hold that the opinions form them are more critically important than older people for youngsters. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore more in following eassay.
First of all, thanks to the technologies improvement. Lots of celebrities will share their opinions on their social media. On top of that, young people always addicted to using social media rather than staying with older people. They might be exposed to the opnions of celebrities more often. My experience is the best illustration of this. When I was in junior high school, I love to play badminton. Tai Tzu Ying, a badminton player in our country was my idol at that time. She always shared her life and perspective on Facebook. At that time, I just kept scrolling her Facebook pages all day long. Every single words on her post can inspire me a lot. On the other hand, older people might have problem about using the internet or the technologies, so they can not have an access to those perspective.
Secondly, young people will be more likely to believe in celebrities, because they have more passion about their dream. For example, enormous TV programs will report about the successful about the celebrities. Everyone will have a eye wittness about their success and prestiges. Therefore, their words will be more attractive and powerful to younger people who want to be like them eagerly. However, those celebrities to older people might not be attractive, because they can not understand about the fashion, or they even don't know who it is.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than older people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'technologies'' or 'technology's'?
Suggestion: technologies'; technology's
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Line 3, column 773, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
... the technologies, so they can not have an access to those perspective. Secondly, youn...
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Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this perspective' or 'those perspectives'?
Suggestion: this perspective; those perspectives
...gies, so they can not have an access to those perspective. Secondly, young people will be more...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...out the celebrities. Everyone will have a eye wittness about their success and pr...
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Line 5, column 524, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...erstand about the fashion, or they even dont know who it is. In conclusion, I str...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95751633987 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64263529365 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539215686275 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5668674433 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.2380952381 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5714285714 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252037698321 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765881384032 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857379446036 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20199814618 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787841033661 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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