Palm oil a liquid produced by palm trees and used for cooking and other purposes has become very popular in recent years As a result the palm oil industry has had a dramatic impact on the economies and landscapes of countries in which it operates When ask | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Palm oil, a liquid produced by palm trees and used for cooking and other purposes, has become very popular in recent years. As a result, the palm oil industry has had a dramatic impact on the economies and landscapes of countries in which it operates. When asked to make a recommendation about whether expanding palm oil production even more would be good or bad for the environment and the economy, many experts have stated that palm oil production has several positive effects and should be expanded.

First, the experts point out that palm tree farming helps preserve the world's forests. Palm trees have a very high oil yield—far higher than that of other crops. For this reason farming palm trees requires less land than farming other crops to produce the same economic value. Since palm tree farms require relatively little land (compared with many other crops), palm tree plantations require the clearing of smaller areas of forest than many other crops would. In other words, palm tree farms cause less deforestation and therefore have a lesser negative impact on the environment than other types of crops.

Second, palm oil is sometimes used to produce biodiesel, a fuel for motor vehicles. Using biodiesel in vehicle engines creates fewer carbon emissions than using traditional fossil fuels does. Carbon emissions are known to contribute to climate change. Biodiesel from palm oil, when used as an alternative to fossil fuels, can help reduce this effect.

Third, palm oil production helps reduce poverty among small-scale farmers. About 50 percent to 70 percent of land used for farming in palm-oil-producing countries is actually cleared by small-scale low- income family farmers. Growing palm trees is usually more profitable for such farmers than growing other crops, and it has in many cases helped improve the farmers' standard of living.

Whilst the passage illustrates three positive effects of palm oil production, the lecturer opposes to each point and gives evidence for why palm tree production should not be expanded. First of all, it is claimed in the article that planting palm tree is beneficial to preserve forests, since it needs comparatively small land and produce a high yield at the same time, which also contributes to less deforestation. But the lecturer refutes this point by saying that the liquid palm trees produce can be used in many areas like food and cosmic industry, whose demand has been greatly increased in the recent years. This requires more land to be cleared, leading to severer deforestation. Secondly, the author of the passage argues that palm oil can be used to produce biodiesel that is the energy source for motor vehicles and emits relatively less carbon with vehicle engines. However, the professor disagrees with the idea, maintaining that it in fact results in additional carbon emission as the land is cleared to grow up the palm trees and burning trees only emit more carbon. Thirdly, the passage addresses that poverty can be reduced among small-scale farmers by increasing the palm tree production, in that it has been proved that growing palm trees are more profitable than other crops. As opposed to this, the lecturer rebuts that farmers do not in reality, have control over the palm trees. Instead, there are big companies take controls over them and farmers can only get very little in return.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in addition, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98015873016 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53616758251 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6969088933 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.444444444 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274315617432 0.272083759551 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109589859807 0.0996497079465 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624634034995 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274315617432 0.162205337803 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.7273730684 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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