Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him into an international celebrity. Though some historians have expressed doubts that Peary did, in fact, reach the North Pole, three arguments provide strong support for the truth of Peary’s claim.
First, the National Geographic Society put together a committee that was instructed to conduct a thorough investigation of Peary’s records and equipment. At the end of the investigation, the committee concluded that Peary’s accounts were consistent and persuasive and declared that he had indeed reached the North Pole.
Second, a recent expedition provides support for Peary’s claim that he reached the North Pole in only 37 days after setting out from Ellesmere Island off the coast of Greenland. Skeptics used to argue that Peary could not have traveled that fast. Since even modern snowmobiles take longer to cover the same distance. However, a British explorer named Tom Avery recently made the same trek in less than 37 days. In fact, Avery used the same kind of dogsled and the same number and breed of dogs as Peary had. Thus, Peary’s claims are not impossible, and he very well might have been telling the truth.
Third, there are photographs taken by Peary that support his claim to have reached the North Pole. Measuring the shadows in Peary's photographs makes it possible to calculate the Sun's position in the north pole. The Sun's position established from the photographs corresponds exactly to the Sun's position as it should have been at the North Pole on that day. This provides strong evidence that Peary reached the North Pole and took the photographs there.
The lecturer refutes all three arguments in the reading passage that support the claim about Robert.E.Peary reaches the North pole. First, the passage suggests that a committee by the National Geographic Society confirmed the works by Peary was true. However, the professor casts doubt about this. He argues that there is no solid evidence for the claim. He explains that Peary had friends in the committee who funded his journey plus they concluded the study in just 2 days, made the investigation dubious. These pieces of evidence clearly show that the group's decisions were biased and hence not trustworthy.
Second, the author of reading suggests that the trip by Tom Avery who uses the same types of equipment and dogs for his travel to the North pole, took the exact 37 days similar to Robert Peary's trip. But the professor contradicts the speed test by claiming 2 examples. First, Avery's sled was similar to Peary's but Tom didn't carry food or other materials on his trip. He was provided by the helicopters that followed his journey. So he can move faster than Peary. Second, the professor adds that Peary faced a lot of unfavorable weather conditions than Tom, which may probably reduce his speed. From these 2 examples, the professor corroborates his assertion that the speed test was wrong.
Finally, the reading posits the photographs taken from the North pole are a shred of strong evidence for Robert Peary's claim. In contrast, the professor said the position of the sun is determined by carefully calibrating the shadows in the photograph. But the photographs are blurred and faded as the camera used in 1909 was primitive. Therefore, the lecturer discredits the value of a worn photograph which was considered as worthy evidence of Peary's adventure trip.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...age that support the claim about Robert.E.Peary reaches the North pole. First, th...
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Suggestion: Peary
...e that support the claim about Robert.E.Peary reaches the North pole. First, the pass...
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...equipment and dogs for his travel to the North pole, took the exact 37 days simil...
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Suggestion: didn't
...erys sled was similar to Pearys but Tom didnt carry food or other materials on his tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, may, second, so, therefore, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 295.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03389830508 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62063935832 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572881355932 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4196182393 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3529411765 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3529411765 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 7.06452816374 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223281501113 0.272083759551 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690348715043 0.0996497079465 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501737531818 0.0662205650399 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149571890978 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295501809492 0.0443174109184 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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