Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus th

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Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus th

Actually, both the passage and the lecture comment about traveling to Mars. Although the passage illustrates three challenging issues that astronauts will encounter on the Mars trip, the lecturer expresses special solutions for the mentioned problems which have been suggested by scholars. According to the professor's statements, none of the problems is acceptable.

First, as the article declared, deficient of foods and water and lack of oxygen is counted as a controversial aspect that causes the astronauts to be limited. The speaker; however, rebuts the claim by emphasizing the proposal which suggests particular agriculture methods. The lecturer elaborates on this idea that plants can be cultivated in water. This method not only provides water and foods but also increases the amount of oxygen when plants convert CO2 to oxygen.

Next, as the writing indicated, the zero-gravity undoubtedly will cause astronauts some serious health problems including declining in muscle mass and decreasing bone density; nonetheless, the lecturer doesn't reinforce the idea by adding the fact that many technics have been detected in order to prevent such issues such as organized and routine exercises.

Finally, the penman sets forth vulnerable to space radiation as the lastest challenge which is can't be eliminated by the earth's magnetic field. On the contrary, the orator doesn't endorse the statement by introducing the steady shelters which are used in the harsh condition when the rate of radiation is so high that is deleterious for astronauts. the speaker puts forward that the level of radiating is diverse during the travel.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 203, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...bone density; nonetheless, the lecturer doesnt reinforce the idea by adding the fact t...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ation as the lastest challenge which is cant be eliminated by the earths magnetic fi...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...etic field. On the contrary, the orator doesnt endorse the statement by introducing th...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...igh that is deleterious for astronauts. the speaker puts forward that the level of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, nonetheless, so, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 253.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49802371542 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81715329728 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620553359684 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.6019364541 49.2860985944 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.454545455 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0464605417039 0.272083759551 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0138230312748 0.0996497079465 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293910621891 0.0662205650399 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0282554053593 0.162205337803 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275074598806 0.0443174109184 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.42419426049 122% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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