Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements In response advertising companies have started using a new tactic called buzz

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Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing.” The advertisers hire people—buzzers—who personally promote (buzz) products to people they know or meet. The key part is that the buzzers do not reveal that they are being paid to promote anything. They behave as though they were just spontaneously praising a product during normal conversation. Buzzing has generated a lot of controversy, and many critics would like to see it banned.
First, the critics complain that consumers should know whether a person praising a product is being paid to praise the product. Knowing this makes a big difference: we expect the truth from people who we believe do not have any motive for misleading us. But with buzzing what you hear is just paid advertising, which may well give a person incorrect information about the buzzed product.
Second, since buzzers pretend they are just private individuals, consumers listen to their endorsements less critically than they should. With advertisements in print or on TV, the consumer is on guard for questionable claims or empty descriptions such as “new and improved.” But when consumers do not know they are being lobbied, they may accept claims they would otherwise be suspicious of. This may suit the manufacturers, but it could really harm consumers. And worst of all is the harmful effect that buzzing is likely to have on social relationships. Once we become aware that people we meet socially may be buzzers with a hidden agenda, we will become less trustful of people in general. So buzzing will result in the spread of mistrust and the expectation of dishonesty.

First, this essay believes that those who have a relationship of interest with a product should not recommend this product to people they familiar with, because such behavior may mislead others. This speaker who is a buzzer himself argues that buzzers will only promote what they really like. And he thinks such behavior is totally reasonable and is not violating any moral principle.

Second, the essay thinks customers will receive fake claims about a certain product from the buzzers, and that will harm the interests of customers. But the speaker thinks that buzzers are usually familiar with the details of the products they promote. They can provide customers much more information than anyone, so buzzers are actually helping customers make a wiser decision on what to purchase.

Last, the essay thinks that buzzing will result in the loss of trust in society. The speaker doesn't think so, and he argues that only those which produce high-quality products will exist. That means if a company can afford to hire buzzers to promote a product, then the producer must have some unique advantages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e loss of trust in society. The speaker doesnt think so, and he argues that only those...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 925.0 1373.03311258 67% => OK
No of words: 181.0 270.72406181 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11049723757 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 4.04702891845 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39613457121 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 145.348785872 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602209944751 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 419.366225166 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9901946645 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.777777778 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0411172319223 0.272083759551 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0193296174105 0.0996497079465 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0153755353246 0.0662205650399 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0305709571256 0.162205337803 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00671805558421 0.0443174109184 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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