TOEFL TPO 34- Integrated Writing Task

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TOEFL TPO 34- Integrated Writing Task

The passage discusses a marin animall. Also, the texy provides three reasons for explaining the extinction of this animal. In contrast, the lecture rejects all the text's reasons by stating that there must be other explaination to this phenomenon.
First, the reading claims that overhunting of these creatures is one possibility for the extinction of sea cows. However, the passage rejects this reason by describing that sea cows were giant animals and the overhunting idea is meanless because there is no need to hunt all these massive animals.
Second, the reading suggests the reason for declining sea cow population is ecosystems disturbance. While the teacher refutes this idea by saying that if the catastrophic ecosystem was a reason for this situation they would see extinction of other marine animals, but in reality there is no sign of other animal's extinction. So, the text's idea is wrong.
Third, the passage refers to fur traders and considered them guilty. However, the talk rebuts this idea and states that the decrease in the population of these animals begin before the traders arriving. As you can see, the text's reason is not convincing.

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Average: 3.6 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...ut in reality there is no sign of other animals extinction. So, the texts idea is wrong...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'texts'' or 'text's'?
Suggestion: texts'; text's
...gn of other animals extinction. So, the texts idea is wrong. Third, the passage refe...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 30.3222958057 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 971.0 1373.03311258 71% => OK
No of words: 189.0 270.72406181 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13756613757 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68040468978 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566137566138 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 419.366225166 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.8154659168 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2727272727 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238981885158 0.272083759551 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895286222843 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798469754566 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14632603632 0.162205337803 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793241844854 0.0443174109184 179% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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