Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Entertainers and also athletes are people that because of their work condition are in the tv shows prorams, in the newspapers and also in the other kind of social medias. So, I think whwther they want some privacy or not they cannot reach to this purpose because of several reasons. Now, I want explain two of these reasons that I think they are important.
First of all, these people are hero for most of the children, teenagers and even for adault. So, these people want to know ablout their life-style, habits, details of their personality, their relationships and other kind of things. Because most of the children want to follow the way that their heros are on it, these famous people have to share their details of lives. So, they have to this because their fans want this. For donot loosing their fans and supports they have share their belifes, their ideas and even their love life. If they act against their idea of their fans, these famous person loose their popularity and bacame ordinary people.
Secon reason that I think is true is something about their fame. Nowadays, popularity is somehow ralated to being available in social media like Facebook website and Instagram application. Famous person for increasing their followers and fand share most of their times in their personal pages. Unfortunatly, recently I saw many gossips between the famous actors and their ideas about these gossips in their pages just because of increasing their popularity and they do these actions by sharing details of their private time.
In a nutshell, I want to say that having private times is neccessary not only for ordinary people but also for famuse ones. But keeping privacy of famouse person is very complicated and also hard. Although, I think these famous person have used to this life and they enjoy it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 599, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...idea of their fans, these famous person loose their popularity and bacame ordinary pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, i think, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88025889968 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34171859133 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485436893204 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9759653033 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.25 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123368596139 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580663386245 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380188321266 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956722865369 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315068994235 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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