Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Regarding whether famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now, different people hold divergent opinions. Some would maintain the standpoint that they should not deserve it because they are celebrity so they know they would attain more attention than common people. I partly agree with their notion. However, from my opinion, I agree that famous celebrity deserve more privacy than they have now.
First, famous entertainers and athletes need more privacy to calm down and think about their own business which is essential for their future development. The reason why they can be famous is that they make people impressed and remember them by their great works or brilliant records. As we all know, it needs time for everyone to focus on one thing without being interrupted before they can produce some valuable works. Therefore the celebrity need more privacy to conceive on their career things. Consider a well-know instance which can shed some light on this issue. A famous football player named Yu became famous because of his excellent goals in one match. After that, he started numerous interviews and programs which distracted him from training in football. Sure enough, his skill became weaker after that period of time and even was excluded from the forward list of his team. However, he returned to the high level again after a long time without interruption and he was so grateful for the privacy he deserved which helped him back to the peak again.
Second, famous celebrity is also human beings like everyone else. Thus it is vital and reasonable for them to deserve their own privacy as ours. Nowadays many magazines and newspapers pay much attention to private life of famous people just because they can make more money by the so-called surprising information they get. However the information itself is meaningless and has no nutrient for the whole society, it not only harms the privacy of the celebrity but also raises some negative effect like gossips. According to a survey conducted by Wuhan University in 2018 about privacy of people in China, it shows the famous entertainers and athletes have only 10% privacy as common people have. And many of them have trouble going outside because of fearing of spying by some reporters. Therefore it is necessary and urgent to take the privacy problem of celebrity seriously.
Admittedly, it is undeniable that famous entertainers and athletes could be paid more attention than us, but it does not mean they should have little or no privacy. Everyone deserves to have their own privacy, including the celebrity.
To sum up, whereas there is an argument that famous people don't deserve to have more privacy than they now, namely they should be paid more attention than common persons, leaving more room for them to stay alone and conceive brilliant works, coupled with everyone needs privacy in life makes a strong case for the argument that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy then they have now.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
... However, from my opinion, I agree that famous celebrity deserve more privacy than they have now...
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Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e they can produce some valuable works. Therefore the celebrity need more privacy to conc...
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Line 5, column 816, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ugh, his skill became weaker after that period of time and even was excluded from the forward ...
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Line 9, column 9, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...im back to the peak again. Second, famous celebrity is also human beings like everyone else...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s also human beings like everyone else. Thus it is vital and reasonable for them to ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...called surprising information they get. However the information itself is meaningless a...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...of fearing of spying by some reporters. Therefore it is necessary and urgent to take the ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...there is an argument that famous people dont deserve to have more privacy than they ...
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Line 17, column 391, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...d athletes deserve to have more privacy then they have now.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, whereas, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2541.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07185628743 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44855759196 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48502994012 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.468098088 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.47826087 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7826086957 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370644457562 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115729193061 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116491241814 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268451579932 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11119745894 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.